Honestly I loved it...seems your message was about the devil made me do it...actually your grammer was fine...you just need to space your words apart...smile...good job...loved it...keep it up

Very well written...with each stanza you draw the reader in to find the mystery...I think you could even continue on with it

Very well written, you can feel the pain, the passion and the loss of a gifted person. The only thing I would change is to take out the word "stop", it disturbed the flow of your poem. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Your Haiku makes some sense except I believe you should be more specific where the color fades.

lol bravo and brave of you to write in your notes about the "cry baby", I believe I know exactly who it is. None the less you made a point with your poem that perhaps all should read and probably will at some point or another. Actually I believe your notes should also be published as a review of it's own. Good job, I liked your directness and tact.

Actually I believe you have two different poems working here. One about the solitude of the forest and the other about a traveling soul. The stanzas don't flow nicely and the meanings I believe you are trying to convey are mixed. Try separating the first and second stanzas into one poem and the third into another. I really started getting into the forest poem. Hope to read a rewrite. Good luck.

I believe that if you restructured this it would work as a poem instead of a rant (smile). Also you misspelled some words and or maybe not misspelled but left out what it should have been such as: I can hear there heart their I not all alone I am Just a few suggestions, there are more errors so just read your piece over. Over all I really liked the idea, very heart felt.

If written for someone...special...or not...you really do need to let them read this....sometimes the best way to make sure someone you care about understand you is to put it into words...obviously someone hurt you...your rhyme was great...good job

If I am catching the plot of your story correctly...it seems to be a web of friends lives that intertwine over the years, if there was more before then I probably missed alot...but I liked the even flow of the script except I believe you should delve a bit more into the souls of each character as you introduce them to the reader. I would like to see more interviening of the characters as a group rather then a one man stand so to speak, more conversation and not so many thoughts perhaps....th...