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AGE: 20
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 03

hello my names gemma, ive been writing for quite some time now, my dream is to be published, because i want people to see what i see when they read my work. id love any suggestions and help to make my work better. thanks xxx

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Short Story / The Greasy Rabbit
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5 Reviews   4 Comments
THE GREASY RABBIT Chapter one The Grease He stares at me from the corner of his greasy eye, his eyelashes are stuck together from the grease that drips down on to his greasy cheek. He is green with red eyes. He bites the kettle which now becomes greasy, no more tea, oh well. He wants to use my phone to call his friend, his friend isn’t greasy. Should I let him use my phone? He grabs it anyway, my phone now becomes greasy, it drips down to the floor like honey on a spoon. He finishes his call,...
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Short Story / The Greasy Rabbit
Version 1
4 Reviews   4 Comments
THE GREASY RABBIT Chapter one The Grease He stares at me from the corner of his greasy eye, his eyelashes are stuck together from the grease that drips down on to his greasy cheek. He is green with red eyes. He bites the kettle which now becomes greasy, no more tea, oh well. He wants to use my phone to call his friend, his friend isn’t greasy. Should I let him use my phone? He grabs it anyway, my phone now becomes greasy, it drips down to the floor like honey on a spoon. He finishes his call,...
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Short Story / The Greasy Rabbit
Version 2
5 Reviews   1 Comment
THE GREASY RABBIT Chapter one The Grease He stares at me from the corner of his greasy eye, his eyelashes are stuck together from the grease that drips down on to his greasy cheek. He is green with red eyes. He bites the kettle which now becomes greasy, no more tea, oh well. He wants to use my phone to call his friend, his friend isn’t greasy. Should I let him use my phone? He grabs it anyway, my phone now becomes greasy, it drips down to the floor like honey on a spoon. He finishes his call,...
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Poetry / Gone
Version 2
2 Reviews   0 Comments
Gone The Earth, A rough, mere sphere of Life, Soon ending, We wait, Forever, The sounds of Despair, Echo in our Lifeless souls, Our Loved ones whimper, The background sound effects of our Existence, We battle, Against the never ending Pain of our lives, All we hear is the pathetic weeping of a loveless Soul, Wait, It’s you, We never matter to Anyone, Never have, Never will, We hear the Endless shrill despair of a Worthless existence, It’s yours, You Can’t keep it, They’ll Always take it away ...
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Poetry / Gone
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Gone The earth, A rough, mere sphere of life, Soon ending, We wait, Forever, The sounds of despair, Echo in our lifeless souls, Our loved ones whimper, The background sound effects of our existence, We battle, Against the never ending pain of our lives, All we hear is the pathetic weeping of a loveless soul, Wait, It’s you, We never matter to anyone, Never have, Never will, We hear the endless shrill despair of a worthless existence, It’s yours, You can’t keep it, They’ll always take it away ...
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Poetry / In Shadow
hi there, i do quite like this poem, its quite dark which reminds me of the stuff i wrote when i was 16, it flows quite nicely and the last stanza picks it up nicely so it doesnt seem to dark, good luck and keep writing
Poetry / Gorgeous to me
hi there, i quite like this poem, its short and sweet, and the last line works well as it wraps it up nicely, keep up the good writing.
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Writer's Block!
hi there, i do empathase with you as i currently have writers block at the moment, overall this is a pretty good blogg, the only advise i can give you is to try not to force it and wait till the words come to you (i know that sounds cheesy but it works).good luck
hi there, i really like this quote, it makes perfect sense.you definatly achieved your to be understood goal.overall i do like this piece, so good luck and keep writing.
Poetry / DON'T WAKE ME
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