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AGE: 101
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 19

I’m a single lady, with two beautiful children almost ready to fly the nest.

I like to write things that are truthful and that people can relate to, and love every style of poetry. My strongest writing is lyrics and I write all types of music. All words are important to those who have written them therefore, I do believe that some of the best poetry written can be found to incorporate very simple words.I am not a biased person, so therefore I try to approach everyone on here with open eyes, and view them to be the person that they are, making them unique. I also have a very funny side to me.

I have been a singer/songwriter, since 1968. I have opened for some groups/people that you young kids might not remember: B.J. Thomas, The Oak…

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Haiku/Senryu / Remembrance
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Haiku/Senryu / (Untitled)
Very different subject for this type of poem. The problem I see is in the last line. In that line you have six syllables, instead of five. (You might just leave it as 'fun libraries', but some people might not think that 'fun' always applies to a library visit.) With that in mind, I would probably change the last line, or if you plan on keeping it-then change the second line also. That way you could tie in 'children', to match up with the 'fun'. Not a bad read.
Limericks / To Dad
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Haiku/Senryu / Paper Dove
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Haiku/Senryu / Water Realm
I read this through a few times. What came to mind was: 1st line I liked, but no need to add a 'period' at the end of the line. In the 2nd line, I myself would rather see: 'leap', instead of 'lap'. And, last but not least, in that line I think that using: 'hidden', instead of 'hiding', just sounds better and makes more sense in the sentence. You can also make you poem more pleasing to the eye, by 'placement' of each line-such as: rapids wish escape crystal waves leap, fall, glisten reflect hi...