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The poem is simple and appealing. There are no high-sounding words and that is remarkable. I think "Looking forward 'for' tomorrow " would sound better than "Looking forward to tomorrow". Besides that the poem is superb.I liked specially the lines "I have found within my mind,/a world that is sublime;/a world that holds the beauty of my soul". I also liked the expression "toward broken spirits ‘neath a setting sun".But do you really need that semi-colon before the line "toward broken spirits....

People are often under the impression that a good poem should always be obscure. I am against that. The idea should be simple and open to many interpretations. I didn't actually get the gist of your poem. It sounds good, or even brilliant I would say. However,it is not understandable.Then, can i ask what you mean by 'mother superior'?. Nevertheless, I liked the first stanza which goes, "There’s a poison creeping/And its killing me,/A desperate man’s vivid dream./There’s a ghost singing/And it...

First of all what I need ask is the relation between Michael and Lily.The poem seems obscure. Then, what is Michael's trouble? I didn't get the gist of the poem . Nevertheless it sounds good. I liked the lines, "I feel the breath of sins creeping up slowly from behind me/Leaving me reminders as I await Judgement Day".I also specially liked the lines, "Just waiting for my time to confess/I can hear my last goodbye,/as I watch the world turn,/to the end of the tunnel/I slowly close my eyes and ...

The poem is simple alright but it lacks a form which is very essential for a poem. Nevertheless it is impressive and the idea gets through easily. The poem is pathetic and straightaway gets to each heart. I really liked it, especially when it covers the 'monster-part'. Besides this i don't have anything else to comment on but it is simply good. keep up with the great work!