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AGE:
25
LOC: Woodland Hills, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 15
LOC: Woodland Hills, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: April 15
My name is Ali and I am 24. Writing is my way of understanding myself and the world around me (and that’s just fine for now since I am in that “selfish” early-20’s writing period according to SOME). I think anyone who can master the written arts can influence, affect and persuade the world to do just about anything because that’s how powerful words are. Thanks for all the support! ;-)
Oh, as a side-note, some of my submissions are from the past few years.
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Fear of fear threatens destruction of self and mental health, a requirement for “enduring to the end.” Tangible or not, withstandable or not, to whom should my debt be sent? To the Lord or the Prince, taking mundane claims at their desks at the end of the world. Where will mine end up? Or doubtlessly lost amidst clouds of sheep counting casualties of those who fear this fear with me. Advice fallen flat upon the salts of time; Time: a destraction from sinful crimes, keep me from what’s rightfu...
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Unceasing, increasing forever melodrama decreasing, diseasing brainwaves slow to a halt. Medicated me is an uneducated me stuck between, no luck it seems for the fucked-up to bring about any kind of change- spare or not. Burning bosom, burning tree but usually it's just heartburn from all the breaking at the seams. Forget me...not after all you were nailed on a cross. I call on you often for any other thoughts but my own.
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Threats of anxiety shape my suffering today in hopes of Tomorrow's Society Hybrid personalities out here in the big red square Mixes of facade & self-realism make me wanna throw-up. Ask advice- Bullshit. We'll all pay the price one day. Lost in thought but thoughts are lost- shot through, shot-up no tangible ideas are accepted here. I'm bored again Half-lives have been restored again into blood- Threatening my only love anxiously awaiting the end.
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between these thick thighs you will find: happiest girl. she fears she fears fear how queer and irrational is she, this happiest girl. She dreams of sharp things and clings to what they provide. In space there are pointy objects. In space it is ethereal- a place to go snooping for lost heirlooms, such as family, god and a woman who only wants her little girl to be the happiest.
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The first year is gone, beneath the ground and in dreams to be found. She's there and here, gone away for a year. The questions arisen still drowning my thoughts- a watery prison, or a pathway to her and to God? or just natural explorations of the body's expiration? And for a young man's family the year has just begun; A fragile, broken frame covered in blood. There seems to be no meaning, yet there will always be a gun. There seems to be no feeling left, but we will always have the sun. The ...
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I like the set-up, although I'm not exactly sure where this story is headed yet (which I'm sure I would if I read more), but I definitely wanted to note how inviting the story was to me-- how easy it was to get into. I felt like I was there.
This was a surprising poem from you. I loved that it was in a much different style than a lot of your other work. The starkness of words can sometimes be a catalyst to different emotions than your other more elaborate poems offer, perhaps. Regardless of the length, I still immediately felt that this poem would make for good lyrics. In fact, they felt more like lyrics to me than anything else. I got a definite hint of a Martin Gore vibe (and you know what a high honor that is to receive from M...
Um, I am no *expert* on what exactly qualifies as a plot line, per say, but I think this sentence was a good set-up for a plot line. I think a plot line is supposed to have a little set-up (background) as well as a little hint of where the story might progress from there on in. After reading your sentence, I am wondering what Bob is going to do now and what kind of story this might be. Keep working on it and don't leave me hangin! ;-)
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I must say that I am a little perplexed by this poem, but that's not a bad thing. It did, however catch my interest *because* I was perplexed by the wording and grammar you chose to use; it almost seemed like it might be better suited as lyrics to a *very* interesting song or something. I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem, including the idea of "unholy darkness hiding stars in the heaven". In conclusion, this poem seemed creepy at times, philosophical, (darkly ethereal, even???), and pe...
I don't know what to say exactly about this "fragment of a scene" except that I would LOVE to read more and see this in the middle of a whole play. This is the kind of intellectual, philosophical conversation that should (and does) take place in every good play. I kind of enjoyed the abstract nature of the scene because the subject of the scene was abstract itself. Overall, I would love to see more from you and more with this fragment, if possible.
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