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AGE:
20
LOC: Dresden, TN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 21
LOC: Dresden, TN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 21
I’m not really sure what I should say about myself.
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Version 1
6 Reviews
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This is my life as I remember it. Chapter One When I was in Headstart I had a best friend- his name was Christopher Allen. Sometimes his mom would pick me up in the morning, and we would go to school together. At recess we would go outside and we’d spend the whole time playing together; that is how I remember it. I was a little kid in love with him, and I remember him to this day. We lived in Arizona when I was in Headstart and some of my kindergarten year as well- which I also remember to so...
Version 1
8 Reviews
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O what mean it to dream. To dream, to be free. Free from this world where they want me to be. O! To be beautiful, Made me think I was strong. But when pain comes a knockin' He tells me I'm wrong. O, to forgive To forgive and forget And forget helps me live a life I regret. O! To be beautiful, Made me think I was strong. But when pain comes a knockin' He tells me I'm wrong. O, to be loved Makes me wish I weren't livin' Because what I'm lovin' right now- Ain't were I'm livin' O! To be beautiful...
Version 2
5 Reviews
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I walk along the street tonight faces pass and I blankly smile and I try not to think of you. and I try not to think of you. Here I stop right where I stand i look around, I don't know where i am. and still I can't stop thinkin of you. true, still I can't stop thinking of you. Green for go blinks on in my head I start to run, but to you I may already be dead and I keep runnin' runnin' running to your door and I keep runnin running to your door. You open up and I step inside My eyes are filed ...
Version 1
4 Reviews
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I remember the walk in the woods, like something that happened yesterday. His voice was more calm and gentle than I'd ever known it to be. He walked so fast, but he moved so slow- as if to preserve these moments together. There was nothing that could compare to this day; a day of hope and of starting something new. This was my last chance to go for it- To take him back. This was my last chance to walk away from what happened between us in the past, and start again, like it had never happened....
Version 2
6 Reviews
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If I could just close my eyes- What a beautiful place I'd see. I would be rid of all the sleepless nights, And the things that worry me. A place of peace, That's full of love. Another life No other one. Where someone gentle walks with me. Where no more I'd have to cry or sleep. For dreams are never good enough, Nor images can show The beauty that we'll never see- Until our eyes are closed.
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For me, the different tenses in your piece are somewhat confusing. Butitis anice story.
I couldn't finish this because the tone was never changing and unexciting. However I do like what you are writing about! I Think it needs some excitement. It sounds like you are writing a brochure about this place. Good idea overall.
I really liked this! How you portrayed the little girl like things that you guys did together was amazing. Every little story throughout the whole thing was entertaining. Of course what was not entertaining- the structure. The beginning was very confusing for me to understand- as good as the story was! If you could put this into a more story-like/ paragraph form that would make it all the better!
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