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AGE: 39
LOC: Euless, TX
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LAST LOGIN: November 03

I have been writing since I was 5 or 6 years old.  Creating characters, story lines, and seeing potential for new plot lines in every day situations is how I have always lived my life.  The only phase of my existence when I wasn’t writing, I felt dead inside.  I don’t know if I’ll ever be published, but I do know I’ll never stop writing; for to me the cessation of writing is akin to no longer breathing.  I realize how angst-ridden that sounds for someone my age, but this is who I am- a player set on my own stage acting out the words I write in my head.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Heart of a Satyr Ch. 6
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Ch. 6 Bhuin Domh “Well? Where to next?” Lexie asked. “The jousters are having a skills tourney soon,” Tristan said and lead the way down the path. There were fewer shops the further they walked away from the entrance, and soon the path gave way to an open field. At the far end of the field was a jousting arena. A crowd was already filling in the bleachers around the jousting field, which was surrounded by a two-rung wooden fence. The teenagers were able to find some space towards the center o...
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Quotes / Sanity
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27 Reviews   21 Comments
My sanity hinges on a little, white pill.
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Heart of a Satyr Ch. 6
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2 Reviews   4 Comments
Ch. 6 Bhuin Domh “Well? Where to next?” Lexie asked. “The jousters are having a skills tourney soon,” Tristan said and lead the way down the path. There were fewer shops the further the walked away from the entrance, and soon the path gave way to an open field. At the far end of the field was a jousting arena. A crowd was already filling in the bleachers around the jousting field which was surrounded by a two-rung wooden fence. The teenagers were able to find some space towards the center of ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Heart of a Satyr Ch. 5
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The World of Sidh From where he stood at the top of the stairs, Tristan saw Claudia walk underneath the bridge. He felt a sudden sinking in his stomach and a slight tingling falling from his face as fear overcame him. He ran down the steps as fast as he could, heart pounding, legs shaking, scared of what might have happened to her. He was angry at himself for letting her go. Why did he have to be so callous and aloof? He had spent every spring on these fairgrounds and had never ventured past ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Heart of a Satyr Ch. 5
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10 Reviews   13 Comments
The World of Sidh From where he stood at the top of the stairs, Tristan saw Claudia walk underneath the bridge. He felt a sudden sinking in his stomach and a slight tingling falling from his face as fear overcame him. He ran down the steps as fast as he could, heart pounding, legs shaking, scared of what might have happened to her. He was angry at himself for letting her go. Why did he have to be so callous and aloof? He had spent every spring on these faire grounds and had never ventured pas...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 7
by stephanloy
"those memories had to be bad."- This phrase seems too amateurish for your skills. "The gesture could have meant laughter, but who could tell with birds?"- I like the touch of humor when everything had been so bleak, especially at this point when Set is being accused. You have expertly captured the grim emotions of both the people and Isis. Also, just when your readers are caught up in the horrors and the despair, you give us a glimmer of hope with Thoth and Ra, making us want to read further...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 6
by stephanloy
"(without going inside the houses!)"- I hate to sound nit-picky, but the exclamation point looks out of place with the overall feel of this passage. Maybe it's just me, but the word "smarmy" does not fit with your otherwise intellectual and near-perfect word usage. One thing confused me, why would Hordedev stop to water plants if they are fleeing? Obviously, his family would not be able to eat the plants even if they did survive. Was it to give aid to the farmers? You have perfectly captured,...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 5
by stephanloy
Your opening sentence is somewhat confusing. It could be better simplified if the phrase "he cursed" was either dropped or moved to the end. I love how you described the chase and the fight scene. It was expertly worded, and I could easily visualize everything Qebera experienced in the desert. Why is Isis honored among a people who only honor their one God? The dialogue was handled just as beautifully as your prose. You evoke just the right amount of emotion and suspense in this well paced ch...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 4
by stephanloy
"beset the city like some awful communal nightmare."- I like your use of simile, but I think it would read better if you dropped the word 'awful'. "The new, Setim servants"- I don't think a comma is needed. I love how Set is being described as pouty when he discovers the ensigns are gone. It's amazing to me that no matter how powerful an evil entity is; they always pout like babies when they don't get their way. It seems to be hallmark among them. "The thought of such audacity festered within...
Humor/Satire / Conversations with my Gayru: Mastering the Mien of Haughty Intelligence
by DCAllen
"A couple people"- I've been told by an English gentleman, Brits get annoyed when Americans drop the word 'of'. "I’m petting his hand."- I love this. It's refinely provocative. "Second, There"- you don't need to capitalize 'there'. Why was Davie telling Curt to sit? There was no action on Curt's part that would compel Davie to tell him to come back. Again, your piece is wonderfully funny, but this time I see a harder, psychological edge with the whole father-abuse stereo-typical issue of male...
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