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AGE: 20
LOC: Hattiesburg, MS
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 21

In order to understand someone, you have to be around them for a long time.

Words can’t completely describe someone.

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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Recent Discoveries have Lead Me to Believe...
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in a new definition of 'being bored' it's when you don't have anything to help you die faster... for instance... when you have fun, time goes by fast right? thus leading you to the end of your life quicker. so next time you complain about being bored, think about this. suck in the silence around you and be thankful you've been given a chance to be here... i know i am.
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how does one paint a picture of an image so that those who know what's going on won't understand and those who have no clue will? impossible i say. one misstroke of a brush can ruin a painting just as much a mere scrape across the pavement can scar our skin. a human, who is dubbed human because, unlike god, he makes mistakes, will make a mistake that will be unforgivable, and when the mistake is so grave there is nothing left to do but forgive the person. usually in that case the person doesn...
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i could write all the words down but it doesn’t really matter because you can’t hear the melodies that sing in my head. writing to get an urge to write about an urge to write. circles and circles. kinda like the ones under my eyes. the shape my fist makes when i’m angry. it’s usually in short bursts though. sometimes it seems like the closest and intertwined don’t even have a desire for their own heavens, and with my current science i have to have the holy number to reach my own pearly gates....
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Summer Chapter One Spring Chapter One Quarrels and Warnings Lucifer stood with his head against the arched concrete window in his room. The barren waste that he ruled over was indeed, quite an eyesore even he was beginning to frown upon. A sea of red sand, cracked dirt, and volcanic ash covered the ground everywhere outside of his castle and city. Endless volcanoes riddled the horizon like mountains in all directions except south, and a never dimming fiery sky kept it bright always. A knock e...
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Poetry / Set Straight
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this reality's too course it's ripping off my skin get me away from this world where everything's indulged with sin i've got to have my fantasy my life away from here perhaps not mine but someone else that is very near let me vegitate now tell me what to think you've got me in a trance, you know, i can't even blink you tell me when to laugh you tell me when to cry but please oh please do make sure you're everything in my eyes eventually i know that you and i must part i'll be sent back to my ...
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The opening with the word "so" and the ensuing sentance helped to set the mode of a friend telling the story to another friend. However, I think you should rework the next line of also beginning with so. "He starts talking… he attempts talking…" Try something like "He starts talking... or attempts to, at least..." The ending was a bit confusing, as I'm not familiar with the phrase. I had to read it a few times and I THINK I have it, but that's going on an assumption. See if you could tie in t...
Short Story / Dearest Dick
Wonderful job on writing a story to relate to. I think we've all done something like that only to slam our heads on the desk asking ourself, "Wtf?" Haha. One thing I noticed was that you couldn't decided which perspective to use. You kept swapping from first, to third, and back, and that disrupted the flow a little. Corpus Delecti, "size the day." Try using quotes here and in a number of other places concerning the messages. Would help with clarity. After all, even though it's a message, it's...
Very very good story. This is one of those that leaves you fuzzy inside. "After several moments, I finally noticed short and shallow breaths coming from the man." We already know it's the man. Simply use the pronoun "him". Other than that and what it seemed like your care to just not capitalize things, this is a great piece.
It did feel like it was a bit too short, or like it was nonclimatical. While purpose was there, it didn't seem like there was a struggle for it. Just something that happened to someone and they were reiterating it to a friend. To that friend it may be hilarious, but to a random person, no so much so.
Sci Fi & Fantasy / No Redemption: Intro
This is definitely interesting. I really like how Xaiver was rambling on about his beliefs and feelings, and then you find out they're demon hunters at the end. I think that's the point the world you were setting really took it's grip-hold on my imagination. I think you should detail a little bit more about the magic that was going on. The reappearing dagger was very confusing to me at first. Also, describe the way the ribbons of magic looked a little more in depth when he turned off the reco...
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