You've really nailed on the head what every teenager thinks at least once in their week.

Nice image if, especially if you read it at the bank.

This is a really nice piece, filled with some spices of humor, mundane living, realistic marital fiction, and the age old fear of a rock falling out of the sky to crush our planet. I think this story has more than enough to make it publishable, and not only that, it is memorable. It is a far step from the cliche little stories about what happens in situations such as this and the story is full of little scenes that paint a nice picture of the world Kathleen lives in. Well done, I look forward...

Draw it up and send it to the New Yorker...or maybe Playboy.

It is nice in the way caramel gets stuck in your teeth and you have to suck it out.

Makes me think of summer camp.

I agree, especially drunken harmony.

It doesn't paint enough of an image. It is more of a resume tag cloud.

I like the opening, and the narrative is really great. You really carve the feel. "to the famous actor Leonard Nimmoy who plays Spock in Startrek" Star Trek is 2 words, and I feel the sentence is a bit of a given. "last of a roll-up" Do you mean fruit roll up...that might paint a better image. I think the images flow together nicely although sometimes the prose is a bit too silly, if that is possible in comedic writing? Overall I liked it and the Spock character is likeable and developed. Goo...