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AGE:
40
LOC: Plano, TX
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 03
LOC: Plano, TX
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 03
My life is far too active right now, so I’m not putting the finishing touches on many pieces. So that I’m contributing in some manner, I’m going to toss up some reading suggestions every so often…just things that I like.
“Love is a Dog From Hell” – Charles Bukowski
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I’m an avid reader and sometime writer. I love to play poker. I’m a bit of a gym-aholic…it helps keep me sane.
I have a background in English Literature, but I don’t t readily admit it.
Favorite prose: Hemingway, Bukowski, Wilde, Kerouac, Celine, John Fante, Chekov, Hamsun, Tom Stoppard, and Dostoevsky.
Favorite poetry: Bukowski, William Carlos Williams, some of Ezra Pound, Pablo Neruda, and Ginsberg.
I typically write poetry, though I do occasiona…
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Driving into San Francisco, seeing the familiar landmarks pass – Oyster Point, The Cow Palace, the sad hillside where rocks spell out the words, “South San Francisco". Excitement builds slowly as the taxi’s odometer rolls the miles. It always feels this way. This is the city of the Beats, my first true literary obsession that drove me to pick up the pen and put words on paper that, in reality, were derivative but felt fresh and alive at the time. For me, the Beats gave way to Bukowski and thi...
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Driving into San Francisco, seeing the familiar landmarks pass – Oyster Point, The Cow Palace, the sad hillside where rocks spell out the words, “South San Francisco". Excitement builds slowly as the taxi’s odometer rolls the miles. It always feels this way. This is the city of the Beats, my first true literary obsession that drove me to pick up the pen and put words on paper that, in reality, were derivative but felt fresh and alive at the time. For me, the Beats gave way to Bukowski and thi...
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Driving into San Francisco, watching the familiar landmarks pass – Oyster Point, The Cow Palace, the sad hillside where rocks spell out the words, “South San Francisco” – the excitement builds slowly as the taxi’s odometer rolls the miles. It always feels this way. This is the city of the Beats, my first true literary obsession that drove me to pick up the pen and put words on paper that, in reality, were derivative but felt fresh and alive at the time. For me, the Beats gave way to Bukowski ...
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Ambien Sleep fueled by Ambien dreams bleeds into sluggish days that pass in a white haze — my head is thick with the shit but I can’t sleep without it. Over time, it dulls wit and forgetfulness plays about the brain with clumsy movements. Thoughts perform a circus for dullards motions jerky and incomplete that simply trail off…
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Ambien Sleep fueled by Ambien dreams Bleeds into sluggish days that pass in a white haze — my head is thick with the shit but I can’t sleep without it. Over time, it dulls wit and forgetfulness plays about the brain with clumsy movements. Thoughts perform a circus for dullards motions jerky and incomplete that simply trail off…
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This piece has a nice "hook" at the begginning. The first few lines drew me into the poem and the first few stanzas held me. I must admit that my interest started to wander somewhere between the 4th and 5th stanza. At that point, though the language and flow were still good, it started to feel like the piece had outrun the content. Though the descriptions are good and the language is graceful, the last few stanzas don't feel necessary. It is almost as if there are two poems here, the first on...
The language of this piece is good. It flows well, for the most part. There are a few awkward moments but they're tempered by clever lines around them. I particularly like the flow and commentary of the "Dead End" section. I must admit that, by the end, I was becoming somewhat bored with the "futility and nothingness" theme that is so pervasive in poetry and short stories. I don't suppose there's any help for that though as it is a key piece of the human condition. In all, the author showed c...
As stated in the notes, the format is intended. I find it somewhat distracting and feel that it may be confining to the piece, but I'll respect the author's desires on that aspect. The language of the piece is good. The descriptions have an interestingly detached quality that works with the content and format. The "nor" and the "not" are jarring in each section. They don't seem to fit with the preceding lines. The reader has to take a bit of an awkward leap to make them fit. I understand that...
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I can definitely say that this piece left me wanting to know more about what is occurring. The "Michael" section at the end is interesting and ominous. I do think that while readers may enjoy the atmosphere, they may have an issue with not quite understanding the story. The piece has good flow and some nice language. I do think that there are portions that border on too abstract or cliche. Some simple changes may help with this. For instance, - consider using "judgment" in place of "Judgment ...
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