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AGE: 23
LOC: Dahlonega, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 14

I’m an English major and while I love a good book, I’ve been trying to write one of my own in my spare time. As of late, I’m writing more non-fiction in the form of term papers in English and Spanish.  
    I’ve been writing since I was thirteen and, believe me, I know what bad writing is because I’ve had to read my own (underdeveloped/immature) stuff for years. I’m finally settling into my own style. It needs work, just like everyone else’s (otherwise, I wouldn’t be on this site), but I feel as though it’s starting to come along (finally).
    These days I do more reading than writing, but come December, I’ll be free to do whatever I want without worrying about deadlines or grading scales. And I can’t wait.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / The Age of Barbarism
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I walked down a dirt road, the dust eternally settled. The cars of our grandparents were only faltering memories in their dim eyes. Personally, I had not seen a car since my middle school days and even then it was a violent exchange between the pedestrians and the rare, unfortunate drivers who had been able to purchase (for outrageous prices) the last few gallons of available gasoline. Those days had always been tumultuous. It got to the point where even people who still had years’ wort...
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Short Story / The Unbearable Reality
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I wanted to yell. I wanted to scream and rant; throw myself on the ground and flail my arms about like a three-year-old. I think it would have helped, but I would have looked like an idiot. It wasn’t fair! How could anyone steal my chance at happiness in just one sentence-one measily little breath?? Of all days, why this one? Up early and in a rush (for early was actually still a little late), I threw on a pair of trousers and a half-wrinkled button down, heels that made my feet hurt as soon ...
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Non-fiction / Imperialism and Iraq
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There are a variety of opinions regarding the war in Iraq. For some, it is a tiresome subject that is to be avoided at all costs. For others, it is the protein of their conversation. The war in Iraq is always discussed in terms of morality and immorality, good versus evil, winning and losing, and cost and benefit. Everyone has an opinion and no one is truly right or wrong when the war is argued in these terms. Although these issues are viable, they are superficial aspects of a more basic huma...
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Non-fiction / Characters and the Character of God
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As an English major, I find that I enjoy writing a good story as much as I enjoy reading one. It is through this mode that I have come to understand God just a little better. Writing a story with several different characters has given me a chance to explore myself. You see, every character I've written has had a bit of my own personality within him or her. Some of the characters are good and some of them are bad, but they all are related to me in some way. Some portray my wild side and the ne...
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Non-fiction / All dripping in tangles green
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Last year, around this time, I wrote about turning twenty. I made mention of my twentieth year being a rollercoaster, an adventure, a heartbreak. It's amazing how accurate that piece was. I remember writing the piece quite vividly. As I sat there re-reading what I had written, I thought to myself, "heartache"? Why in the world would I write something like that? I have no desire for heartache. And yet I couldn't shake the feeling that life was about to get seriously hard. So I left it in. In w...
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Novel Treatments / Witness - Chapter 1 Thomas Hutchins
by andersda
you need a ? after "what is this world coming to" instead of a period. directly following- you need a comma after No instead of a period. no comma after "but those days were over" period after "first hand experience" otherwise it's a comma splice. comma after "letter-writing public" "the judge" instead of just "judge" in the sentence "Surprisingly, the hard feelings didn’t end with judge." comma after "lower" and before "working class" not sure anyone would want to go to jail for any amount o...
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Chasing Faces - Chapter Eight
by Lillie_M
"flying around her mind" should be "around in her mind." "cross-legged" instead of "crossed legged" no comma after "right now" you've got a comma-splice in the sentence beginning with "Sometimes she wished it was her in the ground..." use a period or semi colon to correct. incomplete sentence after "just like the woman in the shop"- perhaps a comma instead? no comma in the next sentence after "Cara" thirty pound should be "thirty pounds"- unless you're going for a more slang use. Overall, I r...
Poetry / The Unfortunate Sonnet
by Alex_Bruinekool
Although I think your poem is clever, when you entitle a poem "sonnet" it typically means you'll be using the sonnet form. I like what you have to say in the poem...it might be more ironic if you actually rewrite it in sonnet form, thus proving that you can write a sonnet and add one more level to your work.
Poetry / To My Wife of 43 Years
by TerJa
This is a good poem. The construction is rhythmic, like the beating of a hammer on hot steel. I would suggest a comma in the first line of your fourth stanza, however. Grammatically, it doesn't matter what you do in a poem, but I think the comma would be good for the rhythm you've developed. It keeps it structured to some extent. My other suggestion is that you move the last line of the third stanza to the last line of the fifth stanza. I think they got together a little better. Otherwise I t...
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Relatively Superhuman: Chapter 1 - DAY ZERO
by Hypernormal
This is a great start. The voice of your narrator is informative and casually clever (love "Morality Mountain"). Question, if Lukas is a physical empath, how does he handle killing people? I'm sure you've already thought of that, but this is something you'll want to describe for the curious audience. Does this ability make him more likely to kill people or less? You later mention that it had been difficult to not pass out with excited people around him. How does he survive the Foreign Legion?...
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