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AGE: 20
LOC: Philadelphia, PA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 02

No matta how ugly a man so, he talk a talk, he just look like movie star:

I love you like how toothpaste love a brush, I love you like how toilet love a flush…I love you like how dogs love plenty trees, like how virus love the flu and drugstore love disease. Love you like a plumber love a leak, like watchman love a sleep, tomcat love a rat, police love arrest, brassier love a chest…

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Poetry / Babies Let Me Be
Version 1
2 Reviews   2 Comments
Babies, let me be I have a soft spot for your art You and you with shaved head, dreads Your stubble, your drugs and musings (you all let me draw on your skin) Babies, let me be I can’t resist the iconography your obscure posters, your worthy projects. We’re all projectors, whirring tattoos and underground music We don’t know who we are but babies like you have helped me pretend (I've transcended my green card, my State Assisted upbringing) I am a young professional I have a tasteful Myspace p...
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Version 1
11 Reviews   14 Comments
I bought the ticket anyway. I’ll find my friends in Philadelphia. There’s a trash bag full of dead dog and broken canvasses at the bottom of Lake Bradshaw. There are four roaches shoved behind the mirror of my music box on my dresser. I stopped wearing a bra. There is an unopened pack of birth control taped to the base of my nightstand. I stopped painting landscapes of Charlesville. I don’t love my father. I have a tattoo on my hip that reads L’ENFANT SAUVAGE in capital letters. The man next...
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Version 1
2 Reviews   2 Comments
You say I am not the one to blame. Google searches turn up the same and the same. They tell me what to feel in convenient acronyms: DSM-IV, PTSD (this is your diagnostic criteria here is who you are, After). Their small space makes me a freak of the freaks. Except you. Together we made the Diagnostic and Statistic Manual something for shrinks to beat off to at their desks. I held your face one night and whispered this in your ear: There is good in us and deep down We were always shining. We s...
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Screenplay / The Rabbit Hole
Version 1
5 Reviews   3 Comments
FADE IN: EXT. WOODS -- NEW JERSEY -- NIGHT A scratched hand with red nail polish rests against a tree trunk. The hand slides from trunk and-- The female figure races through the woods. Blonde hair and robes float behind her as she scrambles over rocks and vines. HOP (V.O.) Once upon a time, in-- CROWD AND HOP (V.O.) A deep, dark rabbit hole... Suddenly, a loud-- BOOM. Overhead, through the leaves, red, white, and blue fireworks explode. TRIP stops and stares at the sky, entranced. She is 19,...
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Screenplay / Mash Up
Version 1
5 Reviews   4 Comments
EXT. GEORGETOWN, GUYANA -- NIGHT Young bodies dance wildly to loud Calypso music underneath colorful lanterns and lights. Dancers wear colorful costumes and headdresses. One, MASH, dances, eyes closed, carefree. The rhythm becomes all encompassing. The dancers, music, and lights become a hectic blur. SMASH CUT TO: EXT. BEACH HOUSE BALCONY -- MORNING Mash, eyes still closed, serene. SENATOR CAIN (O.S.) Look at you. Mash's eyes flutter open. Reveal: Here is Mash -- a striking girl of about 17,...
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I thought this was a very clear, concise query letter. I think brevity and poignancy is everything a publisher is looking for. You seem to have gotten the jist of your idea across very well. I also think column is very palatable and light, something I think any magazine would enjoy. Good luck!
Short Story / Cleaning Quarters
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Screenplay / The Parable of Mr.Lim
I read the original story to get some more background on this script. As a Caribbean girl, I can identify with what the message of this story is, at least what Talia is preaching about and the Mumia references. I liked the basic story you have here and the complex characters you used. My main criticism would be with the screenwriting format. Not necessarily the actual rule and spacing and such, although that would be very helpful if you wanna get this produced, but the different approach you ...
Short Story / Meat and Lamb
I loved this story. The language was so intriguing, it flowed so well, I didn't even realize the length. The dialogue between the characters was not forced or boring; was actually intriguing. I feel like these characters are very, very familiar to me, as well as the scenerio at the end, which I think you handled very gracefully. I love how you showed the humanity in Virgil, how you described him as being from "God Forgot Urban D.C.". I think there is so much understanding in that phrase. I lo...
I really liked this piece, both parts. I liked how they were linked by time, but not related in subject. I think the second part was especially heart tugging without being melodramatic, which I loved. I thought the structure was very sophisticated. My only criticism would be the "Boss of Seconds" line. I feel like that epithet is a bit out of place/irrelevant/forced (can't decide which one). Anyway, really really liked this poem. Thanks for sharing it!