very good it left me asking all sorts of questions like, what is under his or her skin. i like the use off vocabulary to describe it. i think when you begin a sentence in this use caps or italics to emphasize the feeling. such as, instead of look. see it? maybe it could be LOOK. Do you see it? very good over all:)

this is very good. i love how suggested that reality has been replaced by reality television. May i suggest putting a comma after 15 minutes of fame... i don't think that there should be a semicolon after it's the end of the world as we know it. i think there should just be a comma. you usually don't put and after a semicolon. overall very very very good:)

first thing, very good overall. i would like to point out that in the first sentence, "my" is capitalized. i think that some of the sentences could be put together on the first page instead of using "she" after "she" after "she". of course this only pertains to this piece if it was unintentional. if this was intentional, awesome!!! in the second sentence on the second page i believe that you could say, "although,....." instead of using a "but" at the beginning of the sentence. i think the "Ey...

wow. i think this is very good. i do believe though, that it is meant for older readers correct? i ask this because some of the vocabulary and phrasing was a bit complicated. in the last sentence, the quotations around “On The Horizon!”, are not really necessary UNLESS it was a copy of the title or someone speaking. very good overall. loved it.:)

very good. I'm a little confused by the sequence. I am not so sure why you would put that it takes you by surprise and all of that in the first stanza then go on talking about how the morning starts. i think if you fix that it will read clearer. also, i like the vocabulary use in this piece. overall, awesome!!=]

wow. this is beautiful. truly, i don't think that there is anything to correct. I'm adding this to my favorites!!:)

very good. i love how you started it. in "and writing helps fills that hole for a little while." i think that it should be "and writing helps to fill..." very good!!! i love it.

wow. this is soo good. i honestly could not find a single thing wrong with your piece. i would suggest though, to be more descriptive about the emotions. i loved it and i'm adding it to my faves.

i love the English talk. first, on the first page where it says “No. I didn’t see him, Madame. I am deeply regretful. I came here to tell you that it is a no sale. My henchman tried to sway Olson and it is a no go.” i think that "no go" should be changed to something like, "My henchman tried to sway Olson but it was impossibly hopeless." now if you specifically intended for the no go to be there then great. these are JUST suggestions:)i don't know much about English talk but in the very beggi...

cool mysterious. um if you don't mind me asking, why this topic. i would really like to see this the way you meant it:) i say you could probably describe him more(his looks) what does, and she gave him away mean?:):):)loved it:P