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Even fuckheads know what I've dealt with for years Like the niggas and the spics and the chinks and the queers Is the hatred that comes from what everyone fears It's got my eyes all fucked up n flowin' with tears chorus Doo wat didy peely ot tot tam Can I git it sho looks good Got ham!! biddily diddilly diddilly dee got to make this ma'am Bring me up 3 servings Green eggs n jam You walk through a neighborhood you get your ass kicked You talk to a girl she takes your dough you're a trick The K...
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I have hated for years now. I see those pretenders glaring at me with their false superiority and I hate! Blind Seething Hate It is because I feel that no one is superior that I come to hate When I see those who think that because they have been blessed with good fortune they can look down upon me I HAVE HATE If you have guessed then you are right I am the reaper I would like to reap When I see fear it makes me want to leap It gives me energy because without the fear there is no cause I canno...
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To make decisions good or bad To right a wrong and make men mad To have and then in turn be had This is to be king I am not the one to judge And have a thought and then not budge Slosh about judicial sludge I am not a God I am just a king
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First there's anticipation! Who is he? What's he gonna play? Is he gonna make me look like a dumb jerk? Can I get his points? What's he gonna play? The anticipation brings emotions Which in turn bring stress Everyone who plays chess knows about stress Anticipation also brings preparation Reading tomes Analysing old master clashes of Other old minds of the past Gleanings of understanding to take into battle Little pearls of wisdom with which to fight Not understanding much of what is gleaned I...
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The Revelation In a shadowy world where there is constant screaming in agony in a smoky haze from unseen victims ...there exists a lone figure ...who waits for the call of his master. Silently he considers his plans as a face is revealed to him "Now I know The place I go And add upon this person's woe He has not changed his ways and so My Master makes of him a foe" The Foe A fine man as men are He stood tall powerful and handsome whilst swaggering in loathsome vanity "I shall have your wife ...
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I gave this a 5 because I think that it is probably average. I do not dislike the poem, but it is not the kind of thing toward which I am inclined to be drawn. I guess I'm kind of dumb and all the metaphors and symbolism is wasted on me. The punctuation, I have heard, is irrelevant and; therefore, should not be a source of concern. Now that I drawn first blood, you should read the one pathetic poece that I have, if you can find it in this place, and slap me a good one.
Good stuff here. I like the hate thing, because I have thoughts which go along similar lines sometimes. There is one blaring example of bad english..."The blood of which I am covered with". Way too many prepositions. "The blood with which I am covered." begs to be said. There is a poem called "The ABC's of Poesy" by EAnonymous, which I think is funny, but I think you should check out. This sentence would be included in that piece like...Don't put with your stuff too many prepositions in, or a...
Well...I don't know, but if you aren't published soon, then I can't read a lick. You are a truly gifted writer. I have not read anything like the stuff you write anywhere else in this place. I guess I'm lucky I found you. You are truly a breath of fresh air (if you don't mind the cliche.) I look forward to the map of the safe zone and the explanation of what is going on with unguarded anticipation.
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