A plaintiff cry. A headlined portrait of a nation in decay. The last great hope of the consumer/user/taker mentality. As you say Mending is the key. I fear this need for mending far transcends this one Johnny-come-lately country. This need for mending is human wide and deep. A really good poem. Each stanza was clear and each line right. You can ask for your points back (yet another consumer/user/taker metaphor found here at Urbis) but I can't find anything to recommend as an improvement. Keep...

I couldn't make sense of this. I couldn't get close enough to care about this lyric. And the last line was very strange for me. I recommend editing this for clarity. Give us something to hook onto. You are trying to tell us something give us a chance to know what it is.

I get this one. The first stanza stated the theme and you held to it. The phrases were clear and the intent was clear. It well portrays the imprisoned soul. I would actually like to see you expand this. Perhaps keep the theme but expand on it...not repeating the same thing...you have enough of that. Interesting.

This works for me. A statement that becomes a description of self. It worked.

This poem is clever and well written. Let's see...as you easily fall into my trap and easily disappear? lol

You stand away from it all in this poem. You stand at just the correct distance. You must in order to report the truth. It's the sad clear headed woman just used and now sailing through the air toward the trash. Lovely, wonderful and clear writing young poet. As far as recommendations??? Perhaps you might have splattered some blood on the page or perhaps a piece of flesh paid as toll for suspending reason for 3 minutes.

Yes you have you bad, bad girl. And now I want my CD's back. This was a great statement. Does it fit the six game? Who cares really? (angst)

Art school love killed by lust. It is clear and concise. It has humor and pathos. Well done.

Well stated. Well written.