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LOC: Orlando, FL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 31
LOC: Orlando, FL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 31
Hi, I’m a UCF junior majoring in animation. I’ve been working on my stories for awhile. Since I have a great imagination I aspire to become a great creator of books and cartoons.
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The Guardians Fire, Wind, and Earth By Michael Phoenix 1 In the beginning of the twenty second century the world is being ravaged by war. All because of differences in major world religions millions have died worldwide; families have been torn apart by deaths and separation. Many of the world’s largest cities were wiped out and are now uninhabitable because of radiation levels being off the charts from nuclear weapons. Even on American land troops from invading countries were fighting agains...
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1 In the beginning of the twenty second century the world is being ravaged by war. All because of differences in major world religions millions have died worldwide; families have been torn apart by deaths and separation. Many of the world’s largest cities were wiped out and are now uninhabitable because of radiation levels being off the charts from nuclear weapons. Even on American land troops from invading countries were fighting against American soldiers and pushing the military to its lim...
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1 In the beginning of the twenty second century the world is being ravaged by war. All because of differences in major world religions millions have died worldwide; families have been torn apart by deaths and separation. Many of the world’s largest cities were wiped out and had become uninhabitable because of radiation levels being off the charts from nuclear weapons. Billions had died during the five years the war had been going all. Even on American land troops from invading countries were...
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1 In the beginning of the twenty second century the world is being ravaged by war. All because of differences in major world religions millions have died worldwide; families have been torn apart by deaths and separation. Many of the world’s largest cities were wiped out and are now uninhabitable because of radiation levels being off the charts from nuclear weapons. Even on American land troops from invading countries were fighting against American soldiers and pushing the military to its lim...
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1 In the beginning of the twenty second century the world is being ravaged by war. All because of differences in major world religions millions have died worldwide; families have been torn apart by deaths and separation. Many of the world’s largest cities were wiped out and are now uninhabitable because of radiation levels being off the charts from nuclear weapons. Even on American land troops from invading countries were fighting against American soldiers and pushing the military to its lim...
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The story was written well, the grammar was decent, and the storyline was interesting. So far, so good. Your conversations between the characters are done rather well and your punctuation is perfect. I hope to read more from you.
Ahhh, the good old fashioned western. It never gets old to read a western adventure book so as long as you stick to the way your writing you shouldn't have a problem getting published. The grammar was well and the storyline was smooth so no complaints here. Keep it up and you'll go far.
Wow What a nice imagination. I did notice a few grammar problems and some misspelled words but besides that the story line was smooth and unique. With these types of stories it helps to detail things more. Such as side characters' outfits like what were the women in charge of clothing wearing or how did they look, how did the clothing station itself look. Also describe the shapes and colors of the buildings and their surroundings instead of just saying how they just looked at them. Besides th...
It was well written and flowed pretty well. At first it was difficult to see how this was a sci-fi but in the end it all came together. Its an interesting storyline and I'd love to see how it all works out.
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