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AGE: 24
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 12

Just finished my first year of a two-year MA in English literature, I specialize in rural Canadian lit, and have a strong interest, also, in writing creatively. Recently published professionally in a Toronto-area literary journal, I’m looking to hone my craft a bit more so I can build on that experience.

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Poetry / Broken Chords
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1 Review   2 Comments
You see me: Four years old Approaching you with letters Barely legible On a portable chalkboard. “Does this make a word?” Until one day it does. But suddenly I am Alone and struggling With words. You cannot hear what I am trying To say: meanings evaporate Like frozen breaths Of small-town gossip. And I am gone. You are proud But a little jealous-- Passing out information In the local paper: Honors and Distinction A Master, a small faculty position At twenty three. It is only ...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Not Yet Titled (Chapter I)
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11 Reviews   5 Comments
At four am, Eric Lawson is not facing his wife, Abigail, but has turned onto his side, facing the edge of the mattress as it leaps into blackness and silence, broken only by the empty thunk… thunk of the dripping tap. Instead of pacing, he is ineffectually surveying the abyss of their master bedroom; his mind’s eye continuously tracing the outlines of an antique dressing table, his and Abigail’s clothing thrown carelessly over the back of a rocking chair, and the chintz-curtained picture wind...
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 Plus-button Clarity
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11 Reviews   0 Comments
Spread out on clean hotel sheets Toes curl luxury, grasping Threadcount over threadbare. Chin caressing cold plastic lover-- Electronic voice crackling flame Consumed to carbon. Eyelids sink over lemongrass irises, Open again impenetrable. Do you have nothing to say? Nothing. To what I said, nothing. Speak serpent tongue, meanly And render endings... Speak. Nothing. Closed. Click.
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Short Story / The Underwater Girl
Version 1
3 Reviews   1 Comment
The first thing that Daniella noticed when she awoke on that very ordinary day was not that she was completely immersed in water. The first thing she realized was that she could see soles. She blinked heavy eyelids twice to see more clearly. Yes. Thick bands of rubber pressed against smooth glass. She could see the shoe size: women’s 7 ½. They were kitten heels—one tiny round circle of plastic and then a teardrop more, with tiny horizontal lines running across it: treads. She wondered if the...
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Crisp tapping keys-- Music to untrained ears Bring melody to unsung histories, Dust-covered paragons Of untold years-- Secrets sliding lazily along Tiny electric channels of the brain: Salmon in desperate leaps For survival, for renewal Upstream. Struggle against suffocation In torrents of unmedicated thought At an end, floating fitfully Face up, skyward, Long forgot. Courage is the thing; It creeps up from smooth plastic cylinders Institutionally administered Pearls in their oysters; Soft wh...
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Poetry / Finding Myself
The poem as it stands right now is a bit confusing. I get the sense that this is a trans-gendered person speaking, but I can't be totally sure--it's just not specific enough. Formally, it could do with a bit of relentless chopping. Lines like, "I'm tired of stomping down these feelings down." Are just a bit lazily edited, while other lines like "Some day I will find that peace by being that woman." could benefit by the removal of some erroneous "that"s.
Poetry / sweetheart
This is an interesting piece, and I especially like the ending. A few things: exstacy = ecstasy I think you need to draw out the stanza about the phone call a little more. As it is, there isn't enough information in it to make your ending work properly, I think. It seems you're writing about a drug dealer, but the phone call sort of puts a kink into the relationship as far as I can understand it. So it might be nice to have a little more info. You don't need to go overboard, but mention somet...
Haiku/Senryu / Life Lessons #86
Hilarious! I don't have any criticisms for you. I just really want to meet your grandmother.
Poetry / Write me a poem
In a strange way I really liked this one, even though I've never been much for the abab rhyme scheme in other poems I've reviewed. You, though, know how to use an abab rhyme scheme. It fit the subject matter perfectly, and this poem was a ton of fun to read. I especially liked your last line--a bit of a wink. There isn't' a whole lot of insight here--perhaps a little about poetry's honesty--but I don't get the sense that you intended anything but light commentary, so I found everything to be ...
Non-fiction / My Parents' Worth
This was touching, and I really enjoyed reading it. You have a great sense of self-deprecating humor and irony, and it made what otherwise might have seemed like another 'true meaning of Christmas' story really entertaining. There are some interesting points you raise that I would have liked you to expand upon - particularly your relationship with your Republican father. I thought that small point was one of the things that made this Christmas story different from other ones expounding the im...
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