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AGE: 48
LOC: Clayton, NC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 16

Hi. I am married with three daughters and have wanted to write a book for a long time. Two years ago I woke up in the middle of the night with an idea in my head and started writing the next morning.  The novel is complete but I could sure use some feedback. I have also written a few poems and am working on a short story.  I am looking forward to reading what others have written and will provide feedback in a positive and hopefully helpful manner. Please stop by often.

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Young Adult / Visions of An Outcast
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7 Reviews   7 Comments
PROLOGUE Eleanor Hewett started Kindergarten on September 3rd at exactly 8:05 a.m. By 8:15, she knew school would be a long and lonely journey. She was dressed in a faded yellow blouse with a small stain near the collar and a pair of jeans two sizes too big. Her mom had told her that she would never be a beauty queen so it was pointless to waste money on new school clothes. Those words were now making a journey to the permanent memory bank inside Eleanor’s head where they woul...
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Short Story / The Saints Are Coming
by smidlet
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Novel Treatments / First Chapters – #1: Lydia's Critique
by Harold_P
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Short Story / It's Mommy in a Hole
by michipooh911
It is kind of hard to rate the criteria on this because of its shortness, but I definitely like it. You have a talent for telling a story and conveying feelings in a small amount of space. A few suggestions, keep an eye on punctuation, and try to use words that don't end in "ing" to begin your sentences. I would definitely enjoy reading more short stories like this.
Young Adult / Floor Thirteen(A very short experiment)
by crazzeeninja
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Young Adult / "My First Crush"
by cooljim102055
I like the topic - definitely of interest to young adults, and even older people like me who don't tire of reliving those first crushes. I would suggest a little polishing on the punctuation - watch where commas are, etc. and there are a few spots where you have typed a word twice. Small details but things that agents immediately notice. Also, you spend a lot of time describing the teacher. I think you could say the same thing using less words which would make the paragraph stronger.
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