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LOC: Bakersfield, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 10
LOC: Bakersfield, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 10
I am a mother,artist,poet and an aspiring writer. Hopefully through this site I can get the help I need to become a successful writer. If you want to know anything else just ask me.I no longer reside in Bakersfield, but have moved to the San Diego area.
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On a gray bleak morning, Eliza rose. She had decided to take over her husbands ship, whether or not the crew liked it. But it was taboo for a woman to be on board a pirate ship. So Eliza devised a plan to disguise herself as a man. She knew this was going to be a hard job, but was willing to take it on. She would do anything to keep Captain Blackheart from gaining her husbands ship. For years he has wanted this ship since it was in far better shape than his own, and had many more cannons! El...
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Unlikely Friends Herman began digging yet another hole in the ground. It seems this is what he was made for; bringing good rich soil up from below to the top! He busily kept up this tedious chore, never tiring. Going in the ground....coming back up a few minutes later. One day when he was busily digging; Sherman came along! Sherman stopped and watched Herman go down -then come back up. ' Hmmmmm,' Sherman thought. Herman was so busy he didn't notice Sherman was standing there. If that's what ...
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The Innocent One He quietly entered the room. With her eyes, she followed him as he walked across the floor. She kept silent, while everyone else greeted him with there hello's and how are you. Just then he looked her way, she coyly smiled. She was not ready to say hello to him yet. . As he talked with the guys, she watched him out of the corner of hers. He glanced her way, and she quickly diverted her eyes. She was having a hard time looking at him . She couldn't understand it; why now was ...
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Tatiana laid there in bed. She was glad to be alone, even though it had only been a day since Roger moved out. The last few days were sheer horror with him around. It was something she had been plotting for a while now, even though he was out of her place. It was inevitable- he had to die! But how? Where? When? This was something she needed to think about. A way to get rid of Roger, making sure she got away with it. Tatiana didn't want anything coming back on her. This was going to be very h...
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The Veil Veils? Just what are they? In our world there are many who are familiar with veils. Many could be made with different kinds of cloth. A new bride will wear one to cover her face, so when the time comes her husband can reveal his new wife. Then there are the middle eastern women that are required to wear a veil over their face, I assume out of respect. I still haven't quite understood why they have to wear them at all. Then in the western days, bank robbers wore a kind of a veil to h...
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The way you speak should never be changed- for that is a part of who you are. And in your writing that should shine forth, as this one does. Your writing is intense, and full of feelings of hurt, and pain. Like what you said " I am soon to implode" it's like your feelings are so bottled up they burst on your insides. I loved your poem and found it very well written.
This poem showed strength, but at the same time compassion for everyday things. Sometimes we take for granted the simple things in life, or the things we are used to having. The phone thing threw me off, until I read on and I know how disconcerting losing your electricity can be. Your poem was a superb writing, and is well worth being published.
Your poem has a sing song quality almost like it could be made into a song. It also is very clear in what it says about finding love and wanting to trust what they say is right. In fact this is something I am dealing with right now, and finding it hard to put into words that are clear and precise. I would love to read something else of yours, maybe a story and see how different it might be. You have talent so keep up the writing.
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