This was a very powerful poem and showed how many shun saying God's name. You are referring to Jesus being God, which he was in a sense thus people refusing to speak about him. People always disregard him unless they are sick or in trouble, but they should be calling on God every day, and in every aspect of there lives. I feel your poem should be published in ever magazine and newspaper. Although many will pass it off, some will read it and take it into their hearts.

This was totally different that what I first expected. But this was full of wonderous words of humor and would be wonderful for children to read. You should submit this to a magazine that deals with children's writings.

Even though you wrote this awhile back, it is how I feel sometimes. Yet I do away with those who annoy me in my writing, it's safe and nobody really gets hurt.But your poem was very realistic and right on the money. I loved it and will put it in my favorites.

So when you're over done you have lived in the heat of Bakersfield, Ca.,lol. I thought this poem was superb in every aspect, it is hilarious and yet serious at the same time. You showed how the weather or climate can be cruel to some and great for others. Great poem overall!

This started out a bit slow, but got the point across throughout the whole thing. It's a very lovely writing about what make us- us! Nice writing and composition too.

If I was to see this in a poetry outline it would have been nicer. It started out very lovely, but part way through it was hard to read. But that could be since it was run together, a wonderful poem anyway.

You seem to repeat yourself, and some of the wording is backwards, like when you say "even though is he cold and arrogant"- you should change it to "he is cold and arrogant". And you don't seem to say much about Grim that seemed scary, maybe you can elaborate on him a little more. This would make a great beginning of a story, just work on this part a bit more.

Your poem has a sing song quality almost like it could be made into a song. It also is very clear in what it says about finding love and wanting to trust what they say is right. In fact this is something I am dealing with right now, and finding it hard to put into words that are clear and precise. I would love to read something else of yours, maybe a story and see how different it might be. You have talent so keep up the writing.

This poem showed strength, but at the same time compassion for everyday things. Sometimes we take for granted the simple things in life, or the things we are used to having. The phone thing threw me off, until I read on and I know how disconcerting losing your electricity can be. Your poem was a superb writing, and is well worth being published.

The way you speak should never be changed- for that is a part of who you are. And in your writing that should shine forth, as this one does. Your writing is intense, and full of feelings of hurt, and pain. Like what you said " I am soon to implode" it's like your feelings are so bottled up they burst on your insides. I loved your poem and found it very well written.