Oh my freaking goodness. I relate to everysingle word of that. That is just...wow. That hit me hard. REAL hard. I love this. I dunno what else to say...I almost felt like crying...just wow. You captured...I can't even type now. Just..wow..

Wow...so captivating. I really loved this. The only suggestion I have is some of Ivy's dialogue. It seems like she's talking...TOO well. Normally when people speak its not that grammatically correct. Haha, so just dumb them down a bit to make it more believeable. haha.

I really like this! I feel like its me right now. I'm in such depression that I just want to get away from everything. Great job!

Oh my freaking gosh that's so sad. =( I really really like this. I really love the beginning where Mark and Cheri basically said the same things. I just loved how it connected. =) It's an excellent story! I don't know what you should improve on! Maybe make it longer? I don't know, it was perfect for me!

Man, that is so cool. Haha. But oh so sad. =( Damn wife. But this is very excellent. I really liked your voice. It was very readable and had a nice flow. My only suggestion though, is balance "Sam" and "he". I felt like there were too many Sam's. But maybe I'm a little crazy. I really enjoyed this!! It was a very cool read! =)

Bhahahaha!! <3 This made me giggle!!! Thank you so much for cheering me up! I especially liked the whole nostril rhyme thing. Hahaha, that was funny. I really don't have anything bad to say!! I'm not a poet critiquer! Lol

I really enjoyed this. It was humorous and a very interesting read. But there were A LOT of typos. So I'd suggest looking over it and making sure everything is peachy keen. Good job though!

omgosh! how sad!! you are continuing this arent you? i'm definitely going to have to add you as a friend so i can read your next ones!! but i did have one issue. I cannot for the life of me understand this sentence: Torn, seeping hands pulled Kimaal two rotten tree corpses. Call me stupid. Lol. but i just can't doit!! I hope to read more! I really like the way you are developing Kimaal. Her character is very intriuging. And at the end, how us as a read gets a taste of whats going on...LOVED I...

I'm not quite sure this is my style, but it was very impressive otherwise. I guess I found it to be to vulgar and unusual. I also didn't really understand it. I'm just not very good at interpeting poetry. But anyways. Grammatically it's written very well. Your stanzas are seperated well. The flow doesn't seem wrong either. I think its a very well written poem. Good luck. =)