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AGE:
64
LOC: Atlanta, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 21
LOC: Atlanta, GA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 21
I’m 63 and am trying to decide how old that really is.
For a long time I was a musician and a year ago took a course in The Artist’s Way here in Atlanta. I’m learning anew that the qualities of music are present both in art and in literature, and am just beginning to think of myself as a writer, particularly as a poet.
I like nonfiction, and recently read The Great Emergence, by Phyllis Tickle. One of the nice things about being 63 is I can see how so many varied cultural waves are making their way onto shore now for a grand new Reformation/Renaissance. Urbis is one example of the networking and “flattening” that is a prominent feature of the current Emergence. It’s a great time to be alive.
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Skythief A find, a glowing flat fan-thing with flexing spine. Through its ruddy fronds I can see sky. Hoisting it was easy but I strain to steady it over my head. It is longer than my length, wider than my width and the breeze shifts. I stumble I ache, but this thing of lightness is Gift, surely it is Gift and I must share. For me it is protection, sun-shade. But will it also ornament our dwelling? Sweep cobwebs from the corners? Will it warm our children at night, perhaps cool t...
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Great sentiment (makes me think of a Downs Syndrome young adult in our church), with excellent descriptions. The kind of beauty you're talking about has little to do with aesthetics. You imply that one does not need any of the senses to "achieve" heaven. I guess what I'm saying is that the words beauty and heaven are a little confusing and maybe detract from this other really good work. Also, the centered visual I find distracting, but that's just me. Thanks for the read!
I agree with your politics, and think your use of Minutemen, revolutions, freedom, protest, & power work well together. I don't so much like the last stanzas, however - just a little too polemical for me. And: Our time is running out, as we're de-willed, Trying to survive our leader's ly'n. . . . the made-up word and the shortened lying are somehow disappointing to me. I think the last part would benefit from a re-working - and - I hope things get better with our new president! Have fun with ...
Interesting metaphors. Which one do you like best? The strongest part is the last half - very vivid. Surprising repetitions of the "learned to walk" line. I like that a lot - refers, I suppose, to the childishness of the lover - but wonder if you can't find a way to link that line just a little more closely to the preceding line, through rhyme or returning to the metaphor earlier. I like how the first lines of the poem and the last stanza refer to each other, but I wonder if you could find m...
I see the pain in your title, open call, and identify completely with your experience and your analysis of it. It is, however, mostly an analytical work, with only "Warm and soft" expressing your vulnerability. I identify with that analytical self, too, but you might follow this up with some poems that are more in-the-moment, descriptive. The paradox here is that while you somewhat sarcastically (?) make an open call, you deep down want your mother to change (Let go of your self). Look out, ...
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