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AGE: 33
LOC: Ontario, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 12

I’ve had just a few college courses in English (and some in French), but have read much on my own. It’s fun!

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Gently Fallen user onlywish sunset in Autumn bloom on tree gently fallen blanket a new dawn Review by kenbur1222 Very traditional and appropriate Haiku thinking. Were you Japanese in a previous life? Fine piece. My version: Red Solar twilight drifts along, among the trees It's slumber the night Comment by onlywish cloak in shades of white blends between the sky and clouds shadow to the sun Relationships End user Gakitten2006 Broken deep inside, Soulless, nonsense, lost in fear, Fucking emptin...
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Quotes / Conformity
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"Conform to the Norm in behavior, but Be Wild like a Child in your thoughts."
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7 Good Morning Dream Lovers! Welcome to the Early Bird What Happened Call! This morning’s dream is brought to you by our proud sponsor: Early Detection and Re-Direction. Now for your reading enjoyment, Thuuuh ... Seeker! Seeker: I was trudging uphill. Cold was the wind. Grey were the stones. The air was thin. Short was my Breath. Long was my path. Near was the Summit. I came over the rise. What a surprise. A lone seated figure. In Lotus Position. Wearing loincloth and smile. Eyes closed the w...
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7 Good Morning Dreamers! Time for the Early Bird What Happened Call! This morning’s readcast is brought to you by Whiffin’ Brew Coffee, ... Its time to wake up and smell ... better! It was a scary night folks. We visited the MySpace Bar & Cafe (no shirt, no shoes, no service), a local tavern with the decent clientelle, who were interupted by an uncouth stranger ... BAM! As thuh dar opens with a slam ... So sez ye 'eez ugly Well ahz don’t give a ---- Sunbarned, Wi’ ah bituva smell So ye tarn u...
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Newscasts for Dreamers 3 11 Ladies and Gentlemen, we interrupt this readcast with an interesting bulletin. Receivers at the University of Wasatchington have intercepted a signal from the top of Mt. Olympus. The message was in ancient Greek, but classical scholars at Wasatch U say they have interpreted the message. Here it is, verbatim. Message Begins: Respect is now evidently the center point about which circles all human relations. There are three levels of respect. First, and most basic, if...
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Poetry / Lesson Learned.
I seldom see poetry with such brief lines (two words or less!), but the meaning is crystal clear. A quick end to a shallow relationship, in a nutshell.
Poetry / Baby Sheep
This I believe. A truly portentious action adventure, namely, the fate of those who pass on to Another Pasture. It may be a mistaken pun, but does the "Shepherd's Crook" refer to a corrupt government, 'crook' meaning 'criminal'? So our "Current Shepherd" is a corrupt governor, or at least, a crooked one? Or perhaps the 'crook' is like the device used in amature hour shows, in which the feckless entertainer loses the stage, as the crook, from offstage, drags them away? Or perhaps the sheep are...
Quotes / I Alone
Nit Pics Is there some reason the 3rd word is not in the dictionary? How could you misspell in an 8 word composition? Reviewer's notes contain incomplete sentences. Big Pic This is a fine idea, but you alone should do something to improve the expression. How about an illustration which is part of the composition, rather than in a note about it?
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Haiku/Senryu / Whispered Winds
Mythology's glue Gets stuck to someone else new Trapped in tradition
This is marvelous. It has all the classic elements of a children's tale. It begins "Once upon ...", it has repetition, it has inanimate objects take on human characteristics, it has a child as main character, it has "love" for a central theme, it teaches the values of persistence, loyalty and compassion. It is replete with magic and imagination. There is no violence, but there is strife, the struggle to become. The vocabulary is simple, but not too simple. I think it is better than most of th...