i actually liked the poem. it was simple and distinct, very vivid and the topic was very interesting. it shows just how insightful you are, finding stories behind the simplest of things. my only suggestion may be that i noticed that the real point of the poem was just half of the whole thing and it took time to develop. maybe you could remove some unnecessary stuff or make the piece about the man longer or stand out more and let it kind of take over the poem just as it should. great work!

i think the general idea was established well and i like the topic but i think you need to work on the ending, it is kind of left hanging and something seems lacking...maybe add another line or two just to wrap it up before you end it because right now it seems really rushed and abrupt. like, it was only just building up and then it peaked and then ended all of a sudden. it lacks fluidity to it. and ironically, it seems as if you lacked time spent on it like you started it and then didn't rea...

that was really nice, i admire the fact that you managed to send a message and make a lot of sense and perhaps give a lesson with such a short piece. and despite the length, it is complete. nice work!

it appears to be like a short personal letter. it is simple enough and a sweet gesture. but i think it doesn't spike interest in readers except maybe if the reader happens to be your friend.

this poem has that quality that would make the reader fall in love. it melts the heart and just really makes one go awww...in fact, it was able to hold its own that i was able to ignore the structure and all. i enjoyed it. great job!

it is a nice simple poem, it succeeded in infusing a lot of personality in your character, the caterpillar. it was interesting and fun. nice work!

the message is clear enough but it appears really rushed, like not much thought was put into it. it would be better if you played closer attention to details and elaborated on your points more. but if it was meant to be a rave then it was good. but then the rhyme scheme is also quite off. you do it and then you suddenly drop it at the end which kind of killed the flow for me. you can improve a lot on it more though. it is a nice topic. good luck!

to be perfectly honest, i did not get this at all. it lacks sense, flow and thought. it seems like a vague rambling, like you just thought of a word and you decided to write it wherever. i also have no idea if my vocabulary is just not wide enough or if you were inventing some of the words. i.e. hatshepsut? i believe you have a very wide imagination but you need to organize it and not just let it run away with everything. good poetry is a balance of imagination and organization. it should tou...

i like how you personified the night, how you gave it special traits and unique characteristics and how it moves in the poem. i also liked your use of words and how the poem flowed. however, i am not sure this is poetry...maybe a description of some sort but then it lacks the form and construction of poetry. for one, it has paragraphs, not stanzas. don't get me wrong, i loved it, i am jsut not quite sure about the classification and since this is a review, i wanted to be objective and thoroug...