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AGE:
39
LOC: Santa Monica, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 04
LOC: Santa Monica, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: December 04
Kray finds himself in perilous circumstances, in coping with his problem I am changed, usually for the better in some way inside. Yet though I can overcome adversity, some external incidents may go on for some unseen amount of time. Either by fate or pure ignorance I’ve yet to be killed. So far this personal philosophy has worked out for me.
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TAK, TAK, TAKtaktatatatatatat.... the sound of bullets hissing by is always a relief. The bullets find all types of rubbish and send it into the air with meter long explosions of dirt and bits of the city. Time to move, time to run and move froward. Clutch the rifle close, run, jump, fall behind a wrecked dresser, run, jump repeat sliding out into home base, a section of cover, BOOM, a grenade explodes around me sending finger sized chucks of everything into the air; bits of furniture, discar...
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It was 3:AM and I was standing over a body of what appeared to be a twenty something female spread eagle face down minus underwear hanging half over the bed face firmly rooted into the carpet. I nudged the body with the toe of my shoe and said, “What you want me to do with this?” "I called you, I don't fucking know!", exclaimed the night clerk nervously and winced as I nudged the body once again. “These is highly unusual, this is fucked man!” he said as he ran his hands through his hair and l...
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She emerged from the black and still. Nude and slick in clad black from waist to head; sickly sweet dull reflections waxing over floating thrills. But I am still drawn to this place, drawn to the old mill on the lake. Dark lips and white oily stained feted eyes. The water is still, leeches fear this place and some had said to hear her hunting shrill. I come here to remember her. Her body was never recovered and an empty coffin buried on old bunker hill. She invites you, singing a slow sweet s...
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“So who do you have a crush on, what is he like?” She responded in a perky tone, “He was a junkie, a heroin user, and a squatter for 7 years.” she says and my stomach turns into a knot. She doesn't miss a beat and adds, “He also turned tricks.” She makes it sound like two years of sucking another mans penis for dope is only experimentation. She then goes to say, “‘It’s not what he’s been through, what he survived.” I reply, “Fascinating.” She tells me he shot up in his penis, to hide the trac...
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This was great as a sight sound peice. A moment more or less and this you know. I liked it a lot. Steamy, honest and sorta the stuff that people want to read. It was not mean, could have but it was opertunistic. I liked it. Small, easy to read and you did not attempt to push a hard idea in so many words. I do that and I suck at it. Reminds me of that point where a reader wants to know more and I hope it's part of a longer peice. Possibly you have a intro and a more defined ending that has som...
I read through the piece, and twice. I had a hard time discerning that Gus Vernon was either the old man in the future tense or actually some conspirator or accomplice of Gus Vernon's, possibly his father. My recomendation would be to add some object such as ribbions or an old uniform for either the old Gus or the junkie to discover. The flashbacks are a good tool, and where visual but in each flashback should be a pivotal scene. As well, many spec opps returning from Vietnam, removed any bra...
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This piece reminded me of reading, William Butler Yeats...also known as the Soldiers Poet. I enjoyed the imagery but thought the cadence a bit confusing and possibly hurt flow a bit. The overall imagery was more World War I, less of WWII but works just the same for inspiration. The world lingfer, did you mean linger? The piece though a tongue twister encompassed bravery, cold and the possible death of being the unknown solider. The work haunting reads like something from the early 20th centur...
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Norm, I gave it a good reading, and twice. At first I had a hard time getting through the first 5 paragraphs, I wanted to strangle the protagonist, why?! Because all that came out of his narrative was a repiticious he was marching toe and heel with the other sheep and there was no levity in that situation. I was expecting he was for his situation, that he went along peacefully and willing to the slaughterhouse of the law firm. To me this could be tweaked and refined, why, maybe I cam make tha...
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