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AGE: 52
LOC: Marsteller, PA
GEN: Female
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Poetry / Bipolar Winds
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My life is a circus and I'm the clown, I fly so high I think I'll never come down. But then it will happen, it won't take long, I'll find myself crying when nothing is wrong. I live with highs and lows that no one understands, And unbelivable guilt that feels like blood on my hands. I'll be on a roll thinking I'm doing everything right, Then end up causing a nightmare that haunts my nights. Everything I do is too be normal again, But the backfires have convinced me I'll never win. My life is ...
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Poetry / Let Me Go
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I know I’m sick and you want to care for me But I’m still alive and I need to be free. Please don’t be afraid I’ll think you don’t care I know if I want you, you’ll always be there. I need to take this time to enjoy each day And I’ve got to live on in my same old way. All those changes you tell me I’ve got to make Can’t erase a lifetime of innocent mistakes. I did the best I could with what I knew And I gave all I had while raising you But don’t think that now because I’m ill You should come ...
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Poetry / Bipolar Winds
Version 2
10 Reviews   0 Comments
My life is a circus and I'm the clown I fly so high I think I'll never come down But then it will happen, it won't take long I'll find myself crying when nothing is wrong I live with highs and lows that no one understands And unbelievable guilt that feels like blood on my hands I'll be on a roll, thinking I'm doing everything right Then end up causing a nightmare that haunts my nights Everything I do is too be normal again But the backfires have convinced me I'll never win Everyday is a whirl...
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Poetry / Bipolar Winds
Version 1
25 Reviews   1 Comment
My life is a circus and I'm the clown I fly so high I think I'll never come down But then it will happen, it won't take long I'll find myself crying when nothing is wrong I live with highs and lows that no one understands And unbelivable guilt that feels like blood on my hands I'll be a roll, thinking I'm doing everything right Then end up causing a nightmare that haunts my nights Everything I do is too be normal again But the backfires have convinced me I'll never win My life is a whirlwind ...
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Version 1
26 Reviews   3 Comments
As I sit and wait for them to come and take you away, I am taken back to the beginning of my life. The day I lost my breath when I met your eyes. For me, even the act of breathing was never the same again Every movement, every thought, every second For the rest of my days was centered around you. I no longer thought as one, but as a part of something too big for me to comprehend life without. The very act of living was doubled Sometimes the happiness too much for my heart, thus tears of joy. ...
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Poetry / Melody Lee
This is good but left me with questions. Who shot her and why? I think it nedds more information.
Children's / Down, Down They Come
This started out really cute. I liked everything she did to help the tree but the ending didn't seem right. Maybe it needs a little more to make that ending the right one. it comes out of nowhere and ends.
Young Adult / To Have & To Hold
This could be the beginning of a good story but I think you have used too many words that are there to impress. It takes away from the story. it is only my advice but I would rewrite this using common words that we all use and are comfortable with. No one wants to have to stop and think about a word while trying to get into a good story.
Quotes / I Pissed God Off
simple words but they speak volumes. I've asked this for years and someday hope to have an answer as to why someone people seem blessed from birth, others cursed