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AGE: 19
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 30

absolutely insane and livng life. more then that can not be said. im really young and still very inexperienced. my grammar and spelling is horible, i know that already so please dont point that out to me. other then that i welcome all critisism. and im still fairly new at this so dont hesitate to point out anything i do wrong if i do end up reviewing your work…

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When I look at you I think about all the reasons I love you So many come to mind I love the way you look up at me sometimes That big smile on your face Happiness in you eyes Pure happiness and love I love the way you touch Tender, with passion, with love When you touch me I know That you’ll never hurt me When you touch me I feel loved I love your hands And they way they move The way they make me feel special I love it when you hold me close Your arms tightly wrapped around me Your lo...

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Those looks! They freak me out. Those smiles! They give me chills, Those pick-up lines! They are so old Grow up! Don’t you see? I don’t like you! Even if you do drool over me… Wake up! Can’t you see? You’re a freak! I’m way out of your league…

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It’s easy to lose your mind You don’t even really have to try It comes naturally It just seems to happen All of a sudden You see that person That one That is meant to be yours Forever and ever That one person That is your one and only Your truelove And then before you know You’ve lost your heart Its over Just like that Lost your mind

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Sometimes it’s just easier to hold your breath, dunk your head under water and pray for the best. Just don’t put your hopes to high or on someone who is bound to dash them. Keep on praying and keep on hoping. Stick to those rules and you should make it. It should get you through alive. With your integrity attached And your soul safe And your heart still whole If you do however Hold your breath, dunk your head under water and pray for the best and it still doesn’t work...

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Even when i try, i cant.

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by yellllllooow

I love the way you wrote this. The words you used touched and set in your mind like few poems are able to do. I cannot fault what you said or the way you said it. Just some of it doesnt make that much sense. It does feel abit like you hop from one bit straight to another and you leave the reader a bit confused. Then just one more thing... I, myself do not find swearing offensive and do not mind reading it. I also use it when i feel like it and need to convey my emotions better... Do remember ...

by yellllllooow

its a very good peom. i like it and it touches the heart... but it doesnt read that easy. maybe you need to think about the way its structured... thankyou xl13dj13x

by kay_kay

its a bloody brilliant poem and the idea behind it is excellent you just need to watch out for a few things though. colour not color or coler. why would happy mothers make the wind blow? and you need to fix this sentence "because YOU rain..." you cant rain. it can rain though. the ending just needs a bit of work, it builds up and then it just drops like that. other then that i really love it. please gimme a line when you fix it up

by michforoffice

that is an absolutely brilliant story... and the only reason im writing ths review is to tell you that i dont see anyway you can better it. i just wanted to tell you im favoriting it and i sure would not mind if you refunded it... thank you for sharing this with us. well done xl13dj13x

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