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AGE: 19
LOC: Canada
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 17

        
While most people
converse it all away
I
write it down.

♥ Charles Bukowski

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Version 1
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Who needs nature? What, with all the people dying in the wilderness, bears eating random travelers, storms knocking over skyscrapers, and those cute, little kittens tearing the throats out of your neighbours? We can bring all this madness to an end, with our stunning new product, Biobot (all rights reserved, Reboorn Co.). With extensive research being conducted on nanobot technologies, in only 10 years we will be able to program your brain into a computer and upload you into a Biobot. This Bi...
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Poetry / Memories do bite
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A cockroach scuttles Beneath closed doors, This door I see Caked in filth and misery Is archaic; mysterious - terrible. Behind me, my past And memories manifest Themselves physically. They are specters, That haunt my every step. Howling and crying! These specters of mine - they bite. I grope in the shadows For the rusty knob on the door. It crumbles like ancient bones At my touch, so I kick the door down. Before me is beauty Flowers dwell on the walls; Ravens sing fables; The cockroach plays...
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Poetry / Six Feet Under
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9 Reviews   2 Comments
I often wonder what its like to be six feet under, snoozing in a hard oak coffin. Bound to shackles in a heavy stone sarcophagus. I picture myself waking in one, staring at the swirling shadows. Might it be peaceful? Could I walk as a ghost? Shifting through sand and stone. Perceiving the world through foggy lenses. I could prance about in a fanatic frenzy, and only God would see me cry. I would watch my funeral, just to see who would surprise me with a visit for an old croaked pal. If anyone...
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Short Story / piss stain
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7 Reviews   5 Comments
I woke up covered in dry piss, in the underground parking lot of the Valley Mall. Of all the damn places to pass out, it was soiled ground. I wanted to cry, or punch someone. It was still early mornin’ and the sun was just risin’. There were no cars yet. A chill was sittin’ on the wind and whistled in and out of the muddy glass doors. I rolled out of the dry piss, but the stench followed me. A couple of quarters fell out of my torn pocket and rolled all over the dark stain on the concrete wit...
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Query Letter / The Song of Lazarus
It was a well written piece. The Query letter was very convincing and introduced the plot and character well enough. But the story, what a story! At one point I felt like I was going to cry. He had her hair? That was some intense plot lines. A story is great in my eyes when it evokes strong emotions. Bravo!
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Short Story / A Proper Burial
Really, I loved the story, the beginning was a little slow and confusing but as soon as the morbidity kicked in I couldn't stop reading it. I was sucked into the future (or at least I would assume) and I felt the fear and disgust. The end was perfect. I loved it. What an asshole! I really was expecting him to actually get buried. It has some good views on the issues covering over population and lack of food to feed the population. I do however think that the name should be changed for the mai...
Poetry / Breaking Through
Great poem. The flow was almost perfect, but there were a few points where your choice of diction may have disturbed the flow. "Nights burn to dark grey ash" I think you should get rid of the grey or dark or both. Nights burn to dark ash Nights burn to grey ash Nights burn to ash simplify and get rid of the filler. For a beautiful poem you really don't need any. And I thought that the lack of punctuation suited this poem. cheers.
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Novel Treatments / Caroline and Harry Part 1
Short Story / A Proper Burial

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