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LOC: Murfreesboro, TN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 16
LOC: Murfreesboro, TN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 16
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He pointed as they came toward the corner. Isarin's temple was down that street. “I know,” his translator said, pulling his hand out of his mouth and turning. He glared at the back of his head but shook the blood off his hand instead of licking it, closing it into a fist against the rag, and followed. It was hard to yell at his translator when he wasn't looking at him. They slowed to a walk as the temple came into sight in silent consensus. Neither of them wanted to go in there... As before, ...
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The Right Hand The priest nodded to the guard as he stepped around the body of the man he had just killed, wiping clean the small ornate dagger before sliding it back into the folds of his simple gray robe. The other man nodded back, shifting his helmet under his arm. "Thank you," he finally found the voice to say. He only nodded again and stepped around him, twitching his finger at his tall companion in the shadows. Together they stepped outside into the cool night air. He only really notice...
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Wow, I like it... 10/10. Maybe it's the escapism at the end that makes me like it so much. I don't have anything to criticize, which is rather rare.
0.0% Review Quality (3 Votes)
I'd say ignore the people who say it's boring... I was reading through the six word memoire submissions and I think this is one that stands out hte best. ~~,`{@
It has good basics... it just doesn't have anything else. Does she have a name? A purpose? I guess for just a random scene with no plot or anything to be attached to, it's okay.
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I give this a nine because I like it quite a lot, even though I wish you would fix the quotation marks. It moves just a tad bit fast for me, but aside from those two things, it's great. I saw the part at the end about the tie clip coming, but the main twist was both surprising and right for the story.
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