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AGE: 37
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 03

Ever so slightly insane swf living in a very remote area on the windy Isle of Shetland!

Words and Music are my passon.

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Poetry / Hope
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Hope Swamp me in your love, Let me belive, I've waited far too long. Emerce me in your warmth, My darling and lie if you must, No shame encompasses me, Age plays it's part. And I; I no longer care for saving face, twisting words or throwing dice. Pretence; my trusted one so close were we, and I barely knew another way. Self preservation morphs ironically into slow suicide, killing me , almost. Submerged in false realities is not living, Trust was the enemy all risks unworthy. Until you In you...
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Poetry / Baddies Sonnet
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Baddies Sonnet The desolate landscape cloaked him as much as the nights pitch and fleece clung to his sodden flesh; which Long since numbed by Northerly blasts, conjured up, falsely, a rosey mask Still onward he trapsed each step forcing the ground away; away to sumbission, such as he with back aching and ears a'ringing, heard nothing but his hearts joy singing and pain welcomed, nay embraced for warm rain far to kind to seek forgivness, this time Uncomplaining he thought ahead, what lie at t...
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7 Reviews   0 Comments
The one overwhelming, gut-wrenching, soul obliterating , crucifying sensation I am left with. The one killer. The one sharp stab, the twist between the shoulder blades . The one heart breaking cry, haunting, as I lay me down to sleep . The one nauseating Toxic stench; of industrial corruption. Comes contaminating every living, waking breath of me, of you, for as long as we both shall live. Tainting every action I make. Dulling each glory I am bestowed . Crushing all offers of trust with an i...
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Short Story / One way or another.
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29 Reviews   0 Comments
*NOTE this story is of an erotic nature. One way or another ( part 2 ) “Right then” Carl, grinned. Fisting Pete’s hair he yanked him forward and off the bed "let’s go" "Ouch, where?" Pete winced, reaching up to try and loosen Carls grip which was easier said than done in hand cuffs. "You said you needed a piss?" Carl checked, pausing "I do" "So, I’m taking you" he winked Kicking the bathroom door open, Carl hauled Pete after him, pushing him in front of the toilet then stepping back to lean ...
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Royal Midnights Treasure. Thick inky blackness Engulfing. with reliable fingers/ come shadows, dust intimately, Shading in crevices, obscuring light. Portently assuring dawn. This rich intangible blanket of nothingness Stealing objects and objections. Sounds, sound like sound now poised and keen. Eyes nictitating, disorientated direction, faculties fleeing to environs, fixated on occasions elapsed. Lungs ingest and expel the nighttide. Foreboding Mistress Midnight, conjuring trepidation. but ...
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Poetry / Celebrity Addict
This was easily understood and flowed well , I would do my best to avoid cutting lines in order to fit the flow , an example of this is this last two lines in the third stanza. All in all though I got a clear picture of the sad individual you write of and enjoyed the points you made. A small rework of this peice would benefit it greatly. Well done!
Poetry / Wrong Directions
Really like this , one of it flows well when read aloud. I like the meta used instead of the actual addictive substance ( at least I belive thats what youre saying ). I wish I understood the signifigance of the line 'Twenty-seven detorus later'. All in all though this read well , flowed nicely and is a well written piece.
Poetry / Games
Found this technically good , nice flow. The subject matter was perhaps a little morbid for my taste "That maggot crusted lies Which tumble from your rotting lips" but certainly the poem made a strong impact and I am assuming thats what was intended.
I re-read this several times yet Im still unsure of the meaning. Theres some great imagery , the last two lines of the first stanza in particular. I like it reguardless of the meaning theres a feeling, a sentiment or resignition that I gain from the piece. I think elaborating slightly about the subject would be very beneficial to the reader.
Realy like the subject matter here but feel it dosnt go far enough with what youre trying to get across. In the 4th stanza I feel you might more forcefully explain that the numbers dialed are sold as the answer to a happy life , for we cannot live without these things!. All in all I like the thought behind this p[iece but feel you have under sold the idea, it could be less resigned and perhaps more aggressive.