It was good. I read the whole thing...which means you caught my attention and held it...YEY!! I liked the "Such is life." parts... I liked the twist at the end...I liked the description of his alcoholism... very good! I really don't have anything negative to say about your work... It was good...very very good! CONGRATS!! You have a new fan! :o)

This touched a spot... my grandmother just passed away from cancer a year ago... it brought things back to me... your writing did this...and that is good..not many have or can. Good piece...good writing.

SO MUCH PROMISE!! Such potential... The first three and a half lines were GENIUS!!! but then the last sentence in the fourth line KILLS IT FOR ME. very un-balanced for me personally.. one moment it indeed sounds very poetic, romantic and dramatic.. but then it just sounds confusing and self conflicting...for example: in the beginning you say that the sunflowers are, "a feast for the eye." but then.."they turn back into mere sunflowers" You brought me up then dropped me...I didn't enjoy that a...

Hello. Good piece. Spelling I'm sure you've been told of already...and honestly? It really does take plenty from it...because of the spelling I can't fully enjoy it [because I stop.] I'm not quite sure what your beginning has to do with the ending of the piece..but regardless it was full of truth and it is thought provoking. Good! :o)

I LOVED IT! very energetic... very urban "SOUNDING" it was just good! I love your made up words and use of them... Its different..its new...its HELLA COOL! I enjoyed it very much.. Thank You for sharing.. You just made a new fan :o)

OUCH! EXTREMELY POWERFUL!!! I can't tell you how much I empathize..because well...its way WAY too many times...that I have felt exactly the way this piece says..better off gone. But alas..."God is Great & God is Good" and he knows what he is doing.. everything happens for a reason..and he never sends us more than we can chew I always say... after I've gone through and deal with whatever it was that made me feel about me this way...I know deep DEEP inside..that I am a STRONGER WOMAN/person bec...

Good. For a while, there I was like..."yes! yes! yes!" I totally knew what you were/are talking about... I was there..I know, I know!! but then.... "she doesn't even know him."....huh? what? YOU TOTALLY LOST ME! I was there...you had me! but then...you lost me! what happened? huh? I just got very confused when you brought in the "other girl?" You had me though.. it was good... Keep working on it though...you can tweek it better :o)

FREAKEN AWSOME!! LOVED IT! ENJOYED IT! GENIUS! GOOOOOOOOD!!!

sounds finished. sounds done. sounds complete. sounds exactly like what it says... that you found your purpose.. its good..its short and definite.. powerful and done. GREAT!