Awe, this was cute! But I didn't like the end, it seems kind of vague. But I dont know, maybe it wasn't the end. I was sucked in the whole time, I really enjoyed it. Good job!

I really liked this. It was intense and I completely related to it. I have issues with my father, and reading that made me sad. I think it's a great piece and it shows a lot of meaning, even if it isn't about your relationship with your father. For some reason, the line,"Lines of resentment started to form on her forehead" really stuck out. I actually wish it was a bit longer. Good job though!

Wow, this was really awesome! I especially like this line: Memories that invade my brain like greedy termites in a rotting log chewing, chewing, chewing away, transforming it into so much fodder to feed the forest floor. That was a great simile and it really let me know of the emotion that was in this piece. I don't know if it was intentional, but I didn't realize it was your father until the very end. If you were trying to make it a point that it was your father from the beginning, you shoul...

I really liked this. It's sweet, cute and not drawn out too much. I like the way it flowed and it didn't make me have to think too much about the message you were trying to portray.

I liked your thoughts and what you were trying to talk about, but the way it's written and the words you chose weren't the best. In my opinion, the one step from being a good piece from a bad piece is grammar, if that makes any sense. I guess what I'm saying is that if you're grammar was better, the piece would sound so much better. Some of the words you used weren't the best, and the way you would sometimes interrupt yourself or change thoughts seemed a little out of place. I hope this helpe...

I like the feel of this. However, I feel that when you use questions, it takes away from the flow of the piece. I really loved the line that said 'I am not an open book, I am a library unwritten.' That really stood out to me and I actually read it over to myself a few times. But, on the contrary, the line afterwards, 'Choose your own (but make it me) adventure to read', the parenthesis really takes away from it and pulls you out of it. For me, it made me stop for a minute and I had to figure ...

Wonderful. I loved this! It really gave me a sense of Euphoria. I want to know more. I like the way you laid it out.

This is clever. I really love the double entendre. The poem flows very nicely and it's really creative. Nice work!

Short, sweet, simple, and true.

This is great, especially since you say you are not a poet. Here's a few critisicms: There might be more to sunflowers than you think. When darkness etches into the light The sunflowers in the meadow transform into an eerie sight. you should maybe not use the word sunflowers in that last line. It's a little bit redundant and takes away from the feel of your powerful words. Also, it seems that the rhyming scheme may be a little bit forced. A poem does not have to rhyme to be beautiful. This l...