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AGE: 21
LOC: Mukwonago, WI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 15

just had a son.. born june 29th 2007.  the light of my life.

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Haiku/Senryu / Escape
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Like a bird in flight, she leaves her body behind. Oh, what a sweet dream.
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I need someone to hear my story. No, not just hear it but really LISTEN to it. I need someone to understand the things I've seen, the things I've done, and the things that have been done to me. I need someone to hurt for me, because I cannot feel; someone to cry for me, because I've forgotten how. I need to tell someone my pain. Tell them about my father and how he'd drink himself to sleep. How he'd call me dirty names in a slurred language I still easily understood. How I found him passed ou...
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The world will never know my beauty, it is far too ignorant and blind to understand or even see something so exalted. I burn brighter than the sun but somehow remain unnoticed. I talk soft but laugh loud, my antidote to the corporate poison we're fed on an hourly basis; injecting their dirty words straight into our veins telling lies of right and wrong, what is good and who is bad, worship their glorified gods, false as they may be- they’re stealing all our freedom.. are we even really free? ...
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love is for the weak and feeble-minded; i dance with gypsy spirit in circles around you and your kind. i am above this crutch called love. i stand on a pedestal unbeknownst to you called cynicism. i walk with gods and lay with angels in my bed of sinful engagements. we know not of emotional attachments, just skin on skin entrapment. so tomorrow when you think that you love me, just remember i'm better than that.
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Poetry / One Man
I guess I wish there was either some commentary on this or just a clearer meaning.. I liked it, but I wasn't able to apply it to my own experiences, nor was I able to get a clear idea on what exact type of experience you were drawing from.. good style though.
ahh I seriously love this. especially that last part. you chose your words wisely- good use of our vast language which so few choose to explore. I think if I would change anything though it would be the very beginning.. it just seems to start rather abruptly, and with this poem I feel like a smooth start would be a bit more fitting. nice job though really.
I really like the end of this poem, I think it does a nice job of portraying the feeling that you're trying to get across to the reader but perhaps some work could be done with the rest of it.. some more imagery perhaps would do the trick.. I dunno it's nice though, I like it.
Poetry / speechless
okay I'd like to disagree with sickmnpmp's review. I love that this poem is slightly vague because it gives the reader so many scenarios that they could apply this too. and I've always had a thing for poems that start with and.. I dunno why really. but over all I really like this.
Haiku/Senryu / Ray of the Blue Devils
this is really an amazing haiku.. it's so.. painful. but so intensely beautiful at the same time. I'm totally dumbfounded by some of the powerful statements that some really talented writers can make in only three lines of words, like with this piece. it's awesome, really.
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