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AGE: 20
LOC: Phoenix, AZ
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 02

I am twenty years old and I have been writing since I was about fifteen.  I mainly write short stories. I prefer writing fiction over anything else because I can get crazy creative.  I have done some journalism.  And it is something that I would like to get into again.  I’m a very opinionated person and I have a lot to say.  Thank you all for listening!

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Short Story / Coming Undone
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4 Reviews   2 Comments
Coming Undone Kimberly sat in her king size bed smoking a Marlboro menthol and staring at the pill bottle that lay atop her designer satin purple and silver bed sheets with tears in her eyes. The bottle was small and orange with a white child safety cap, the label had been torn off, and the bottle contained twenty-three 30 mg oxycodone (also known as percocette). She had spent every last dollar that she had on those pills. She had bills to pay, but didn’t care. The young girl of twenty years ...
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10 Reviews   13 Comments
School is a place where children can feel safe; where they can be themselves no matter how different they may be, regardless of race, religion, or sexual orientation; or is it? Over the years schools have faced many forms of discrimination; especially high schools. Teens get picked on because of the color of their skin, what they believe in, even what they don’t believe in. But in this day and age, teens are faced with another issue: sexual orientation. A recent study found that 31 percent o...
Short Story / A Walk In The Park
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5 Reviews   0 Comments
It was the perfect night. Justin and Patience were taking a walk under the full moon in Central Park. It was well lit and the street lamps were shining down on the trees, adding to the beautiful colors of the fall leaves. Red, yellow, and orange crunched beneath their feet as the young couple passed bike-riders, more couples, and children playing along the path ahead of them. Patience, a young woman of twenty-four, with waste length, light brown hair, and deep brown eyes was holding the hand...
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Short Story / Trashed
Version 1
5 Reviews   2 Comments
“What in the hell happened last night?” she asked herself, while standing in her utterly trashed living room. She remembered throwing the party...but she couldn't remember what happened at the party. There were beer cans, beer bottles, cigarette butts, joint butts half empty bags of chips all, all over the floor. “Whatever...I'll clean it up later.” she made her way to the kitchen, which was trashed as well. As she opened the refrigerator door she began to remember the events of the previous ...
Short Story / Stay With You
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3 Reviews   0 Comments
Stay With You... "What are you doing here?" Viola asked him. She and I were sitting in a little cafe down on Seventh Street. It was pouring rain outside. But hey, it was London, and it did that often. When he walked in, he was covered in water. He wasn't even wearing a jacket. He just stood in the doorway, looking around for her. When he saw her, he just froze. He didn't say anything. He just stared. Until she yelled at him again. "I asked you a question! Why are you here?" She had been cryin...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Starclaw
I have to admit, I'm not at all a fan of Sci-Fi. But this was amazing! I think that your story is definitely publishable. No doubt about it. The plot line was wonderful! I can tell that you put a lot of hard work into this, and that makes it ten times better because the readers see how dedicated your are to your work. With that aside, I'm just going to list the few things that need work. In the first chapter you are very descriptive, and that is not a bad thing at all. But I feel that you are...
Short Story / silent wings
This was written beautifully. The theme that even something long forgotten can influence people's every day lives, is just brilliant! I enjoyed the fact that it wasn't ridiculously fantasy. It was just right. With that said, I'm just going to list the things that need work for you. Here they are: When Medicine Woman is talking Silent Wings, all I saw when I read it is Ben Stine dressed as a woman speaking to Silent Wings...No emotion, no actions. It was boring. Be as descriptive as you possib...
Journalism / Journey of One
I'm a bit confused by this. Was it meant to be journalism or short story? Your criteria says "Publishable SHORT STORY" but you put this in the journalism category. It doesn't really feel like journalism to me. I think that it would be better suited in the Journal, Diary, & Blogging category or something like that. This piece was very well written though. It was an interesting read. There were a couple of little errors though: "Any way..." -That should be one word. "grand children" -Is one wor...
Journalism / "Stamp It Out"
I enjoyed the topic. I am a gay rights activist so this immediately drew me in. But I think it was too short. This could be something great...but it's SO short, therefore it's forgettable. I will say though, that it was very well written. I could see it in a newspaper now. In these two sentences, you DO NOT need semicolons yet they are there anyway: ”Maggie Mayor from the YMCA showed up and so did Karen Parker, Senior Youth Worker for Paignton who was thrilled be part of the campaign(;) as sh...
Journalism / The Invisible Hand
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