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Poetry / Lovers cry
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broken tears tear into the souls of my feet, leading me from absolution to destruction. Sun dried hands seem to tear across my frail cheeks, leaving me stranded upon silken sheets of mistrust. Forsaken smiles seem to dance across closed eyes and brighten the darkness that creeps within tired sighs of regret. know me seperate from the misleading shadows you have left for, and remember that tempered glass will strengthen within the fire. Don't follow my trail of bleeding footsteps out the door,...
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Poetry / Angel
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toasting innocence above temptation holding judgement against the wall and all the while leading fate. that white which candles truth in all its' nights, blinding purity from evils sight pushing down the faith of those lost, to serpents pride. upon these soft wings my prayers do fly. And she escaped from streets of gold coming down beside me, taking me into her love and fighting back the light. we close our hearts to that pull from fires down below, and dance upon these shooting stars; fallin...
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Poetry / Here On Earth
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step back and give me time to realize that I am the ceator of my dreams, the innovator of a reality that never ceases to exist feel the beating of my heart, as it pounds a vision of love into the unseen air, give a moment of silence and let your soul begin to swallow the message that I posses. touch the heavens that have eluded our clouded hearts; washing in the purity of our forgotten tears, bleeding years as we become striped from the lies which we dress. Taste the passion as it flows throu...
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Poetry / Lasting
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and she emeged from that tide, lingering in thought. covered in a gown of innocence she beckoned forth those welling seas of me, and pulled them close to ashed shores of heaven. I seemed scattered admist the distant sky, in smooth pinks of eny and blues of reassurance I lay. pulled so gently into the sea, chasing after this mistaken reality of my dreams. she is so real here behind slumbering eyes. I can smell that earthly perfume it is ciennas and umbers that enthrall my spirit- it is her. As...
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Poetry / One
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wrapped inside your smile I taste wishes as wine, becoming drunk in your kiss my lips melt into your deisre and flow down soft clouds of skin, grazing on the perspiration of your blaze. eyes wide shut, I feel you arch bringing me closer to you;taking us to heights of purity unfelt inside open hearts. salty ringlets of prayer dry my tounge as doves cry.
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Short Story / Aural
This is a great read, very intriguing and moves well. I love the twist ending it really threw me for a loop. I thinkyou relayed the emotion very well and gave the reader a sense of his confusion at the end. It was evident what happened and how he was blinded by obsession. Wow is all I can say .
I love the irony in the piece how the mind can play tricks on what you really see.
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well you do manage to move your point clearly across, but to what audience are you trying to reach. You validate what maybe shouldn't. I can't argue the beautiful nature of the poem and the ease at which you pour it out. Great piece, I may not like its nature but I you do have solid talent.
Poetry / Sangria
The images of a strong woman with a soulful tender soul are ver clear here. the read is almost like a jazzy blues song , I think you should move into how you move and than finisht the piece off with a line that describes your convictions/morals you know, and than it would be a stellar piece. So far though the sense of who you are and your self image are good. the punctuation is almost a reflection of the curves and corners of who you are.
Poetry / You
Great Piece the visuals are astounding here, the way you trace the concept of this memory and actions surrounding it. the second to last line really ends abruptly though, it leads off and than you go right into the end I think it needs a little more there to bring you home. That is my only suggestion.
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