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AGE: 34
LOC: LA, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 24

I’m originally from Venice Beach, California and have recently moved to Kansas City, Missouri.  My love for reading and writing has led me on various ventures through out life.  As a teenager I was the editor of the poetry/art section of my high school paper and held poetry readings through out Los Angeles in the 1990’s.  As young adult I continued to write and co-edited a small zine with graffiti art and poetry as the main threshold for work.  I have taken classes under Allen Ginsberg and Tom Robbins, it was my pleasure at the time to make Tom Robbins laugh during a class with a quippy one-liner.  Over the course of my career I have enjoyed a fruitful marketing career, even as a director for a high profile investment firm formed by the …

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Short Story / Marcy/Marci
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      The rain poured onto the street rolling out of the sky as if it was a slanted back drop. Marciano walked up the street, drenched. His skate board was useless under his feet slip sliding into the gutter, the wind pressuring him off like a drunkard, he’d given up and carried it blocks ago. Miss Levy was driving along the same road on her way home. She peered over her steering wheel, yes, she was sure that was the neighbor boy. She honked her horn. Marciano l...
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      Ilene arrived from the gate, walking toward Lola. She smiled warmly, they hugged and walked toward the baggage claim. She fanned her kilt that she was wearing over a pair of dark blue jeans, the aroma of pot filled the immediate area. She laughed and Lola smacked her arm.       “You have to stop that.”      “I don’t know what you all are so worried about out here…Can you smell that?&rd...
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Short Story / The Service Industry
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The service Industry I’m not sure how I came to that conclusion as a little girl when asked what I wanted to be when I grew up that the logical answer was “a cocktail waitress at Caesar’s Casino in Vegas.” Now, at thirty-two, I’d just received my uniform for the hotel cocktail waitress position I once thought would be elegant and glamorous. As an adult, I’d been in marketing positions with various corporate companies since I was out of high school. After being chained to a desk and departing ...
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Poetry / Sir Michael
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Speaking to you is like plucking eyebrows tiny sensations of pain over and over again, pulling out hair one strand of dignity at a time, just to look a little better Hearing your voice is an abscess reminder of going away and inflamed tension that takes me weeks to get over, while my mind attempts to rewind and replay each word, syllable and consonant Staring at you is like a reflection of ones self in an addiction be it a bottle or mirror, It’s a truth too hard to swallow and too difficult t...
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I ran from Judas’ kiss as a child I embraced him turning my cheek as an adult Betrayed led astray I give in too easily to doubt I beg stones for bread unable to live alone and I have starved for so many days and nights My friends Sacrificed next to me being less pettily thefted lives I saved souls never believing the truth in lies Into your hands, I commend my spirit Lift me above, please
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Short Story / Life
all good points. with that in mind I'd expand. each line expresses something all too vague. what beauty of music? blues, jazz, etc? purr of a cat (I own two, I know) but a kitten a sedate cat, what? tell more - you have starters in each line - fill them with more meaning. :)
Humor/Satire / How to apologize.
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Poetry / encoded mind
a ms holocaust! what a great idea, how so many of us live. ultimately - this is an emotional poem, displaying the frustration of writers block. as far as critiquing it goes - I'd aim to say that you could uncapitilize the lines that are meant to "flow" and/or throw in some commas. ultimately a brain dump which we all need to do!
Humor/Satire / How to be a woman.
a very funny and bitter thought! by the way excellent pix. I would change the line with some orange and take out the word "some" all you're missing is the spilled milk my dear, good read.
I would suggest commas - and de-capitlization per line where not needed. Ironically where I think it's too much to write each line "I was..." or "I've" I would encourage it here - this poem is about YOU or the CHARACTER and I say "own it" i.e I was told what to think" or use the comma to connect those thoughts - which you do well -- if only with the comma. I like this poem, you deserve to be independent and think so - and I hope you're not above a little editing because there is something here!