interesting. It makes me think about innocence and fragility. Like I say in most of my reviews, more sensory detail or figurative language will help bring it to life better. Describe the settings or even the feelings with colorful imagery.

this has some really nice language. Images like ,"that glance of shivered blue left me feral" and "I spied iceflake glints on your dew-claw" are really beautiful. It has a great overall rhythm and feel. A lot of imagination. It might work well as a longer poem or maybe different parts tied to this theme. Great job.

This comes off a lot like a book report. It doesn't really say anything about your personal interpretation of the book. Alot of what you're saying is really obvious and sounds like a book summary. Maybe you could get into the themes and the message of the book, look further beyond surface level. What does the book say about human nature? How do you personally feel about it? Also, it doesn't really flow. Try reading it out loud and work on the rhythm. It shouldn't sound forced.

The first stanza seems somewhat out of place with the rest of the poem. Maybe its just because I don't understand "who" the tug/gut punch/hangnail bleeding is supposed to represent. It makes me think of a gritty hard working life. Makes me think that you're a construction worker or some kind of manual laborer. But then, "you" would have to mean you in some third person sense. Other than that, the whole poem sounds pretty good. I enjoy your use of language and your voice/persona really comes t...

reading this poem just makes me itch... Makes me feel the feelings a junkie might feel. The explosive highs and lows. The almost sexually primitive constant craving. I like the feeling of the lines "I am screaming dreaming summer" and "darkness softly enshrouding". They really seem to express the feelings one might get, the giving in and release. The screaming highs and the down periods. This very much has the same message as songs like "Master of Puppets" and "The Needle and the Damage Done"...

never thought I could read a poem based on the Wiz of Oz I liked so much. Seems like you just got inspired and ran with it. It really worked. Put a interesting spin on the whole thing. "Lets crush a rose in the poppy field" is a good line I think, and the use of language, imagery, and references make it stand out

This rolls along nicely, nice pacing and rhythm. I like the dark comedy and the so what/"devil without a care" but looking for love (in a strange sort of way) attitude...? The trippier images are my favorite and I especially like how the explicitness and directness of "Even when I'm on acid" contrasts with the strangeness and ambiguity of "like roses growing out of her head" (which is also stated very matter of factly. I wish that you would take this even further and push the limits of realit...

Semi-ah-moo, Salish? I take it you're from Washington? Maybe you should revise your notes to say, "If you don't get it, you're probably from a different state? Anyways, this has some pretty amazing use of language and imagery. Its almost overflowing (pun intended) with semi-abstract sensory detail. Very unique and creative!

Interesting idea to write from the perspective of a simple nondescript and anonymous garden plant. Hinting at some greater message I assume having to do with people interfering with nature with the apparent intention of making some internal, artificial environment more beautiful, like flowers are happier in vases. Something about the ignorance (and egoism)of humanity? Anyway, technical stuff? I wonder about who the speaker is at certain points. For instance, "after we shredded them together" ...

This piece I think for me is beyond the reach of my personal judgment. I do feel that it very successfully conveys through tone a sort of bewilderment and questioning of the selfishness of people who operate capitalist society. The unanswered questions in this case can reveal more than any statement or accusation. The use of the refuse/refuse is interesting. Because to reject or refuse something is essentially to treat as garbage or refuse.