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LAST LOGIN: June 29

Hey.  I used to write poems.  There’s some here.  But lately, I’ve realized how DEAD poetry is, and how BAD most “poets” are, so I’m moving on.  I’m writing comics now, but I still love good poems and short stories.  

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she asks: “whatever happened to dancing to the radio, alone, in a state of undress?” she was fantastic for questions like that. never mind the half-moon plainly visible in the late-afternoon sky, the real light show was her brown eyes, constantly flickering children’s television shows of huggable puppets feeding the hungry. her smile slid a wriggling fish of hidden erotic passions past my belt, while some ridiculous ideas about peace and tranquility set up shop to sell their wares: glowing pl...
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Poetry / PARTY DREAM
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Bethany is passed out in her bed, oblivious to the party thriving in her house. Brian enters to tell her good-bye but when she continues sleeping, he chides her for crashing at one a.m., whispering stories to her dreaming ear: “Old Lady Bethany,” your friends will call you, “Old Lady Bethany, she just can’t handle her own brownies!” “Klunked out at one!” “What kind of druggie baker is she?” to which you will say to yourself, “Hey! I’m a damn good druggie baker!” but no one will believe you. s...
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Poetry / Balloon
"When I was just a little boy, my heart was a balloon that floated away only to find the sharpest cloud was you" Bad. Ass. If you made this a bit longer, it could fly. 2nd line could use some clarification, but other than that, awesome.
Poetry / I Want It All
From your notes: "Im just gonna throw some lines down and i hope you like them" This is not poetry, this is LiveJournal.
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Lyrics / Small Numbers
Keep in mind, the big numbers equal nothing. The smaller ones, they should keep you hunting. I like this bit The rest needs more conflict and metaphor
Lyrics / Paper Houses
Good literature and art is found in conflict. Character A wants Character B, but B hates A. That's the beginning of a story. You have no conflict of any sort in this, making for a boring, pedantic read. Not to mention the complete lack of specifics or detail, which make this poem/song completely unidentifiable to the reader/listener. Keep trying!
Poetry / Sunlight
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