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LOC: LA, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 30
LOC: LA, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: June 30
Have you ever had that sinking feeling. Well current i have been feeling like I am going down. But it is not stopping me just staggering my progress. I feel as I am being tested, and I am determined to pass even if it is just a D- I will pass. I write all the time since i’m not much of a verbally expressive person. Having written houndreds of poems and short stories usually set in my current mood I just feel it is time to share them with who ever will read them. Hoping to get some good contructive criticism in order to help me grow as an artist of words. So read them all and let me know how they maded you feel. peace.
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Simple Math Lost words, Formulating…matriculating in my mind. Tongue tied, tongue gone. What a silly phrase of words, yet still wrong not rite…not write maybe left or etched or typed. It would be easy if it where simple math arithmetic like 1+1=2 of find the square route of x(yz). But it’s human chemistry. Not all of the data is there, I can’t read through or dissect a stare…Why co I care to continue searching for the words, stupid. No…not stupid, chemi...
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Feeling of the past Today I discovered Scars I just uncovered Blinded by My naive eyes Did not want to see How bad you hurt me Did not want to know How deep the wounds go Did not want to believe I let it hurt so Sitting here saturated in my blood Mixed with salty tears Makes the wounds burn Exposed to air B U R N Heartbroken You, moved on Me, in pain love lost, long gone Why? To afraid to say What I felt inside Not ready for what you expected of me But know, Shed tears for love lost Slowly di...
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I read you; I read it out loud for all to hear Pages of tragic tears, fears for those you hold dear Thoughts that were whispered into your perceptive ears All there on those pages I read you Pages 1-40 of your life, only close to the end did hope reappear I read it aloud for all to hear Of how one’s life is lived when you let people in Mostly full pain but every other page the sun shined in for seconds As I read aloud the harmonious phrases and poetic context streamed out of my mouth As I mov...
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Here I sit Wanting, waiting, longing for you to touch me Slowly moving your hands all over me You get to my face Trace my lips with you fingertips Taking your time to touch every inch of my willing skin It tickles but yet feels so good Umm, I moan out loud so you, so you know it feels good Now you use your tongue as a pen to trace me More moans of pleasure It’s starting to get hot I squirm with excitement I lay there vulnerable You look at my naked body and approve of what is done Now our lip...
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I use the cover of the night to shield my dreams Fantasies At night I put the sugarplums to bed and let the black cat prowl Stalking the sweet dreams like raw meat dripping with blood They devour them Turning my thoughts once more From sweet kisses of my lovers lips To vampires lust filled bites My eyeslids stutter and twitch as I sigh aloud But those felines counter my pain Drowning it out with purrs Trapped Cornered by these hungry monsters I close my eyes Squeeze them tight and scream at t...
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I thought it was very good. my favorite part "Ah; to mine gracious floated heart, which causeth even the Creator to set afire Love’s swift enemies… “Be ye true in’t, thine own glove, to exist only too welcome’d… devoured by love…” As a sparrow sitteth to sit or singeth to sing; I longeth to love, to be your cause; my hand thy glove." the wording very vivid I could see this girl/woman saying these beautiful things in perfect phrases awesome.
I loved every word i am a great big fan of plays and just could see actors bring this to life. My only problem with it is that if this is a stage play there is not morphing, just merely another actor play the younger part. so that is the only thing that should be changed. Man- There’s so much I wish I had told her. Regert the real silent killer. kudos.
I wish when i was your age i was this advanced in expression. I am probably is far behind your level but that is neither here nor there. great job. but i believe music is the beauty that is rearly expressed in reality a waking dream.
if it was about myspace than you forgot to mention the guns and gore, it's much more than the graveyard it's a mine field be careful not to get blown up. oh if i forgot to mention great job nice imagery.
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