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LOC: Lapeer, MI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 06
LOC: Lapeer, MI
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 06
Hi! Christie here..What’s to know? I’m from a small town in Michigan that’s SUPER boring..I’ll be 28 in February..Writing is what comes naturally to me..Thanks to some of the reviews on here, I’ve been able to see my work from the other side and edit appropriatly..Hopefully this will help get my name out there and get me somewhere.
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Scene: a small coffee shop. It is brightly colored. A radio is playing in the background. Time: present. Midday. Weekend. At rise: veronica is walking through the door of the coffee shop. Her close friend James is sitting at the back of the shop. Veronica (Pauses inside door, looks down at paper in hand) Now who..? (Looks around, spots James) is that..? James? Jamie? James (Looks up, smiles, waves her over) Roni! Hi! Come over here! Veronica (Sits down as she hugs James) Jamie! How lon...
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The Game: A One Act by Christie Tondu Cast of Characters: James – a man’s man, 22 years old Mark – his best friend, who is struggling to ‘come out’, also 22 years old Scene: The Silverdome, at a Lion’s playoff game. Time: Present. At Rise: Stage center there are 4 chairs. James and Mark, who are currently in college, are sitting in the stands, watching the game. (The boys sit down as they continue cheering) Mark Aren&rsq...
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ME: All True.* *Fabricated when necessary.
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The wind gently rustled through the tops of the trees and the August sun blazed brightly through the branches, creating small pools of light on the greenish brown grass. A boy leaned lazily against the trunk of a large gnarly tree. Reaching up and pulling his worn out blue baseball hat farther down his forehead, he shaded his eyes from the morning sun. He stretched his long thin frame out, his tan legs emerging from the circle of shade. Raising a thin muscular arm, he scratched his head thro...
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Driving down these same roads Singing along to a boy I dont know I may not know him But he knows me He speaks what I cannot say He does things I only dream He has the same dream to be free And he wears the same mask as me a mask of smiles and laughter to hide all the fear and pain fear that i will never be anything and the pain this fear causes he sings of love and loss of struggle and victory he knows what i wish for and sings of what cannot be Driving down these same roads Singing along to ...
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as far as this being lyrics, i dont know. it makes a good poem, but as lyrics, i cant hear the melody, it dosnt seem to flow musically. and i dont see how the title has anything to do with the actually poem. good, but if its supposed to be a song, make it flow a little better.
its good. i know the rhyming this was supposed to be sort of like dr suess, but to be honest with you, it was kind of distracting. i mean, you shouldnt have to..find things that will rhyme..like mat and trap..overall, it has a good theme and i say if you work on it, it will be good. the rhyming is cute, but not necessary. i would love to read this when its finally finished and illustrated.
its good. it definatly has potential. it kind of feels like the characters are a bit..fuzzy around the edges. i think they have a good basic outline but they need to be a bit more solid. and this isnt really a problem, but if it ever got published for the united states, the aussie slang would need to be edited, as it can be a bit distracting. then again, thats the only way you know exactly where this takes place. work on back stories. when you know the characters backwards and forwards, as we...
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