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AGE:
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LOC: Buna, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 06
LOC: Buna, TX
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 06
Aspiring author. I have published a few articles, poems, and short stories on line. Almost finished with my first 300 page paranormal romance novel. Drop me a line I love comments.
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I stood up and took his hand. As I walked toward the door, I crooked my finger beckoning him inside. “Would you like to come in?” I asked gently tugging his arm. Dean paused, looking for all the world, like he’d never been more unsure of himself. “Are you sure that’s what you want?” He asked as his hungry eyes scanned the length of my body. I could feel his smoldering gaze as it washed over me from head to toe. “I’ve never been more sure of any...
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Tonight was the night for good little Lilly Tate to go bad. “ I’m gonna watch T.V. while you shower. Then, I’m going to take a shower, and when I get out, well let’s just say I have a little surprise for you.” I quickly flicked my tongue up the side of his neck. He was hard instantly. I tossed him a towel, “ Here, lover boy, do us both a favor, and go get cleaned up.” While Dean was in the shower, I pulled out the bag that I’d hidden under the ...
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Nickole Bane P.O. Box 1284 Buna, TX 77612 Boonikbuff@netzero.net Dear, Can a Naive young veterinarian and a 500 year old vampire find love despite the fact that they belong to two different worlds. I would like to submit my manuscript The Private Journal of Lilly Tate to your agency for representation. The novel is approximately 320 pages, or 80,000 words. It is intended for a female target audience ages 18-50. It is a paranormal romance, set in a fictional town called Fargo ...
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Your characters are so real and believable. The dialogue has a great natural flow. I am assuming the formatting is due to urbis. I am enjoying the story so much I am going to read chapter 1 too. Keep submitting the great work. “Patty.” He smiled his best ‘sorry I haven’t called’ smile. “What are you doing here?” "Sorry I haven't called" Or nightmare. should be in quatations. Not exactly. should be in quatations.
I really enjoyed the chapter. I'll have to go back and read the previous to catch up. I think you have an admirable amount of talent. Your dialogue has a very natural flow to it, and your narrative description is go too. It seemed clean for the most part as far as major typo's, misspellings, and gramatical errors, but here are a few of the things I noticed: Sweat pour from his body, puddling on the deck, mixing with the morning dew. "pour" should be poured. /> “Does it matter?” I'm sure th...
So very deep. I know many people this decscribes to a T. Keep up the good work.
Dissillusion hmm yes I know exactly what you mean. I like this one alot.
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