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A box of chocolate is like a box of wood or rubber-it has no pieces. And it's not too much trouble to smash 10 candies to get a carmel-which then is worth it for sure!
Action Adventure / The Club (A Completed Novel)
I don't know how to review this but i know I want to tell people things and don''t know where i can put it so this is a good idea or the only option...I want to ask why the same items are for review every day? Is that all the new stuff you all have ehre?? You gave me a lot of hope when you said you published this novel;I am going to resad what is here to see what it's like. This was a friendly way to explain things out right to people, a good piece,thanks for ssshowing me how to leave a messa...
JedOherty of Australia tells American Charliehorse that he calls rubberbands elastics not rubberbands because that is what rubberbands are called in Australia; also that fairs are called "shows" there, he tells another reader.
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
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50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Lost and Found
I like "the dark shore" and some other visions because i LOVE THOSE Places AT THOSE TIMES OF DAY but you said the corps and left the quotes going on so that it is the cult known as "Corps Cynicism and Practicality Have Taken Over My Otlook It Is Both Often and Normal Being Lost in My Surroundings Emotionally and Intellectually It Is the Quiet Moments of Solitude and Freedom in the Beauty of This Place in Which I Find Myself Corps." You also don't say enough .. Keep trying, Waikki is new to me...
Non-fiction / My [yet untitled] Memoir
You put too much weight and neediness on Allison, that is why she seems mad. Please let people smile at you-get out of the house. If people don't smile in Washington, if they are like Russians, go to the next small town. Go to where the night fishermen gather all night, go to the smiling people who aren't there artifically by alcohol.If I had smiled at Cho and then you had and then the cashier had and then the next person all his life those Virginia students wouldn't be dead. It's good writin...
Short Story / When Will I Wake Up?
I agree with your view of the cliched life but It isn't a story but like a story of a story.A story shows not tells, this is all tell. For example you'd start with conversation and being on that show up close , a scene of it. It's true to life and that dirty dog Ralph is not how a story would say it , they'd make you realize he's a rotten man, not tell you. Still I like youtr little style.And I'm glad you are on the q as all this other stuff was trite. Of course he took her tupperware.I can h...
You would have a great story iiif it was longer. It's to short to even make an episode of Gunsmoke with. But it's a beaut. I feel like i am the guy in the street hearing the rounds of drinks that placate everyone else , too many, many times I am dragged out there. Once i got a high IQ on a reder's Dif=gest IQ test and the other 3 who took it said no way and i cheated just cuz none got oast the first problem when the timer stopped-they were so lost! I hate it when your truth is not believed. I...

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