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AGE:
57
LOC: Redmond, WA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 20
LOC: Redmond, WA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 20
This is dedicated to my small, bent, group of loyal fans whom I love!
I’ve been writing since I was about 12. I never finished short stories, except in class, but on my own wrote chapters (or a chapter), and I have a folders and notebooks of what I’ve written sitting in my storage locker in Lexington (the one in Kentucky).
I like fantasy and good ghost/vampire (with the exception of Ms. Rice) and occult stories. Peter Straub is one of my favorite authors. Stephen King doesn’t even come close to matching him.
I don’t like to talk about me, so I won’t, except to say that I’m horse crazy and nothing can be done about it!Oh, I’m also a solo practitioner Wiccan.
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It felt good to take a shower and eat his mom’s cooking. At ten o’clock, his eyes betrayed him and would not stay open. No sooner did he lay his head on his pillow, then he fell into a deep sleep. He was walking down the road past their campground. It seemed so unnaturally still that he looked up into the trees to see where the birds were. His feet made hardly any noise as he walked on the soft dirt surface of the road. “Michael”. Someone said his name. He looked to th...
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The restaurant was quiet and the lights dim. Sara and Mulder had a booth in the corner and no neighbors, and the food was better than good, something unexpected in a town so small. They ordered a bottle of wine and spent their time talking about each other, feeling the other out. They resisted a second bottle, but ordered heated cognacs that they slowly sipped, each waiting for the other to bring up the subject of the disappearances. “Okay,” he said, “Now that we’ve ea...
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They all agreed they’d go home and try to act as if nothing had happened. They’d go home and pretend they’d had a good time and couldn’t wait until their next camping trip. At the moment none of them had any appetite for any more excursions into the woods until this one could be forgotten. If they were lucky, they would not have to deal with this any further. If by some chance the police wanted to talk to them again, they hoped their parents would be understanding abou...
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Moving the Legion from Gaul to Brittania was no small feat. A Legion was a small city, and we were literally sailing that small city across the channel. It was a hard thing for some of the soldiers, many had taken women of Gaul for substitute wives and they had children. There were many sad goodbyes, and few of the families would ever be re-united. But soldiers were soldiers, and they knew their duty. They were Romans first and family men second. I was miserably seasick during the crossing. ...
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Moving the Legion from Gall to Brittania was no small feat. A Legion was a small city, and we were literally sailing that small city across the channel. It was a hard thing for some of the soldiers, many had taken women of Gaul for substitute wives and they had children. There were many sad goodbyes, and few of the families would ever be re-united. But soldiers were soldiers, and they knew their duty. They were Romans first and family men second. I was miserably seasick during the crossing. ...
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Love the Gollum-esque resemblance Very original and creative way of framing your story. Your imagry is very vivid, your prose flows smoothly. This is very readable, if a little too "modern-esque--but that is just me. It took me a while to realize that HMB, was Hannah. Also, I am not sure how I feel about your use of "footnotes", for lack of a better term. I am also not sure that the sudden switch of scene from the Reverend to Hannah in the small town worked for me--even though you did an exce...
First of all, you need to read this through and make grammar corrections. That done, I think you need to define Axel as you have defined the other two for consistency. Is he human? Or is he a werewolf as I am assuming. You just need to clarify that. No long explanation. I think the character of Devin is over-done, as in if he were on stage acting, he would be over-acting. He's a little too sarcastic, acts a little too like a self-righteous. I'd say try and re-work him a little. Keep the sarca...
The trouble I am having with the characters at this point is that I'm wondering if they've developed feelings for each other, as opposed to doing what they do because it is convenient. Karim lusts after Angel, and wants to protect her, but the operative word--love--is missing in his thoughts about her. All he seems to see is her potential as a sexual partner. Angel seems to feel some antagonism towards Karim--love interest definitely not there though she is intrigued. She seems to be doing wh...
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It didn't take a rocket scientist -- this is a kind of worn out cliche. Can you find a different means of expressing the same thought? I like your next sentence about the vampire--Could you work the beginning of the paragraph around that? These sentences need to be re-organized. The wording is fine, but the structure needs help: In the past three weeks I had been to more clubs than I ever wanted to set foot in, looking for the undead bastard responsible for the killings, Each week I'd go hom...
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