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I have to make this admission--I loathe non-fiction memoirs. Sincerely,...loathe them. With that said, I found this one to be riveting, genuine, non-preachy, non-judgmental, and incredibly well written. There was no self pity in the authors tone--only a powerful descriptive narrative that didn't beg the audience for pity, but brought a quiet grace to a tale that in the wrong hands could have been the reason why personal narratives are so relentlessly unreadable. Excellent work.

This piece was vulgar for the sake of vulgarity in places--but as a person with a limited amount of television stations available, I too have been sandbagged by Dr. Phil and Oprah. So, I have a great deal of sympathy for the authors point of view. However, considering the subject material, I think the author could have gone ever further. This was well written and enjoyable!

The information in this piece was interesting, clearly written and intriguing! I have only one negative thing to say in this critique, which is the P.O.V. seems to shift. Parts of the article are written in the first person, others in the third--so that can be jarring. I was engaged, and then thrown out of that thrall by the author. I wasn't sure if the author was going for a "Gonzo," type of journalism, or striving for an objective piece. However, in terms of the author interjecting their ow...

I thought the descriptions in this piece were lovely. I also enjoyed reading about the artist. I have only a couple of small comments/questions. 1) Rockville, (state?) 2) I would also get into a little bit more of the artists biography. The author put in the artists death, perhaps a little bit more about his life? Even just a paragraph would give this piece a little more fluidity. This was a well written piece though, and I hope it was published in the paper.

I liked this piece, and I really enjoyed the humor. The only comment I have is that this is listed under journalism, but it reads more like a short fiction piece. (Which is in no way a bad thing!) But the author might want to do some revision to either make it more objective to be a journalism piece or more subjective to make it (a very funny) short story. This was an enjoyable read.