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AGE: 22
LOC: Baton Rouge, LA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 29

Hey everyone, the name is Michael. I am 20 years old and attending college for business management. I write when something tweaks my mind and hopefully some of the things I have to say can do the same to you and that we can all learn from each others writings, situations, and life in general. Please forgive any misspellings, grammar, or punctual usage.  I am not an English major, and am very bad with things of that sort. I am just a man that knows how to feel.

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Version 1
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I thought about my life's desire... I thought about a burning fire... I thought about...the world... I think... Its over No longer I feel it growing stronger Alone I walk the winding ways Prisoner of war Things couldn't get much worse You should have known by now I'll burn this whole world down You can't escape but to think... Your hearts desire About a burning fire Where it leaves you For another liar.... I make mistakes In the lie that the life I've found It's coming down I don't know what...
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When is a lier a liar? Misspelled words Teacher, says he’s wrong? But concept understood Its all the same Lie to the liar Save the sane It never ends, It never ends, It never ends, We're all the same. Fabricated certainty bleeds Wrong and right The façade of life Young man what do you say? Jump right on Swing from breath of man (Hang on tight Jane) It never ends, It never ends It never ends, It never ends It never ends, It never ends Where do we go from here? It is a jungle (I’ll save you) Pa...
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Don't expect me to make the move Ill spill my drink again Covering up all the words you said It'll stain your carpet truth You have nothing left to lose here And nothing else to prove You point your fingers at me But at least my lies tell the truth I see through you And everyone else who is waiting here for everyone Just leave me alone Run to the west and catch the sun And bring the dark with you For this night bears no love And the sky no moon You dimmed the stars that light my way As I foll...
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Poetry / Your Eyes
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I still believe in your eyes No matter what what you say Don't make me wait to long Do not make my heart pay I'm broken inside Don't you feel my pain? I'm broken inside Don't you feel my rain? I need your starry eyes To dry my raining cries, Bitter cold like a winter drizzle Don't you feel my pain? I'm broken inside Don't you see your rain? It's your deep green eyes That are crashing into me It's your deep green eyes I drown in every time I see It's your deep green eyes That sets me free Don'...
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Lyrics / Lying Secrets
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The secret to any regret Is not to let it affect you now Don’t ever forget (yeah) No need for you to pretend That it, just never happened It’s time to, it’s time, confess(yeah) Given these circumstances One too many last chances Hello again, I remember you, last weekend.. I’m sorry for no introduction But this week I’m sober and.. I would like to take you back home… Let it rain for now Let it all come down You can’t just float your way out You have no where to go, but under… Lie to me, baby, ...
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Poetry / how shameful
wow i just got out of a relationship about 3months ago and i felt the same exact way you just wrote down on here.... its good to know were not a lone in this world thanks
Sci Fi & Fantasy / MARCH 1-Chapter 2: A Cup
Very well written out. Easy to follow structure and interaction between characters. Is there ever any narration between character interaction or is the whole story played out by dialog? Maybe just more in depth into the characters lives maybe? Good sequence throughout though I would like to read more of your story.
I can not find anything wrong with the ending either. Everything came together well. Your story kept me interested for most of the 1st third or so, then kind of lagged. picking back up at the end though. Everything flowed well between the interactions and characters. I like the spelling of words on how they sound more than how they are really spelled, for instance your spelling for "son of a bitch" unique.
Haiku/Senryu / Hollow Victory
sad,
Haiku/Senryu / Reflection
nice
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