i usually hate reading anything but this chapter was very interesting to say the least. your imagination must be wild with ideas. i love the interaction between all characters in the story and how well they flow together. your wording is easy to follow and i do not get lost while reading as i do with most materials i read.

At times through your writing the sequence got kind of dry then would pick back up again. It was kind of hard to keep my attention through the whole story. I like your writing style which made it a little less dull. Everything flows well with one another. You use good wording in situations that I could image what was going on at the time, which I think is important in any writing. Nice job.

pretty well depicted the likes of a modern day "model" good metaphors used in comparison between models and beauty. you hit upon almost every major point from the editing, to the size, to the cover up, your sequence flows well and i really wouldnt change much to it. maybe a revise but nothing serious. good work keep writing

permanent anything at that. very reassuring quote for me. thanks for posting.

whoa nice imagery, i saw so many things from reading this. I have no clue what the "meaning" behind this was but shoot it can make your mind jump to many things. Nice

nice

sad,

I can not find anything wrong with the ending either. Everything came together well. Your story kept me interested for most of the 1st third or so, then kind of lagged. picking back up at the end though. Everything flowed well between the interactions and characters. I like the spelling of words on how they sound more than how they are really spelled, for instance your spelling for "son of a bitch" unique.

Very well written out. Easy to follow structure and interaction between characters. Is there ever any narration between character interaction or is the whole story played out by dialog? Maybe just more in depth into the characters lives maybe? Good sequence throughout though I would like to read more of your story.

wow i just got out of a relationship about 3months ago and i felt the same exact way you just wrote down on here.... its good to know were not a lone in this world thanks