Lyrics / Never Fit In

LEt me just say this has a really nice rhythm and flow to it. To me it felt a lot like a nu-metal/rap-rock sort of thing like, as you had mentioned, Linkin Park or even earlier POD. While that sort of music never really gets on my good side, I think this works nicely. As far as the wording, a few things might twist my tounge, but you have it worked out pretty nicely and I think it mainly depends on how you perform the vocals. You’ve taken a topic and really carried it the whole way through without seeming overly repetetive. This is quite effective, and with the write music, you have a pretty awesome piece on your hands.

A very important issue that is not adressed enough. The imagery is very appropiate with the dark feeling this piece paints. Many feel what this piece convey’s so beautifully. The darkness is truly concieved through the lies and manipulation society plays on each other. The beat is a little bouncy but the overall feeling is tremondously on target and I love it. Good work. Keep it up. Thanks for the read.

  Interesting piece. The construction and flow provided ample room for musical application. The subject matter allows for a wide range of musical genres and so would be usable by a variety of musicians.  

I believe this part…

“Apathetic force of bad habits cut like splintered shards
It’s become a living, mind twisting, hard-wired reaction
To everybody else’s actions that is tearing me apart”

...displayed a very good use of wordplay and metaphorical vocabulary which is always a good thing as it “vauges” things up enough to allow for personal perspective and interpretation. Likewise you managed to choose the right phrases to bring across the emotions involved in the emotional sprial that results in the end feeling.

Good and promising piece.

it’s hard for song writers , because we are always looking for something different to write about , so we become different in our endeavours
Because I’ve got no map to rely on

Feel like I’m blazing a pathway so twisted and long

we have to be different but just a block away from the same ..

keep writing

lookingbeyond

damn this is the best lyric so far that i’ve read its great…i kan pikture myself going through all of that and the sum wat smart words give it a good way to keep me intrested its not just another lyric with typical words great job

Hello, after reading your lyrics I really don’t know where to start, in telling you which stanza I enjoyed more.

My favorite stanza of your lyrics is number four, and it’s because of a job that I  used to work at. On this job, I was made to tell “little while lies”, or maybe face losing my job. So, I know all about hiding what I was feeling inside.

Can’t really tell you anything I didn’t like about your lyrics, except for maybe punctuation, you might go over that.

I loved your lyrics, and I think that you have a bright future in writing them.

I’ll look forward to reading more from you.

Best Wishes

I saw in your notes you said that you were listening to disturbed while writing this piece and that you wanted to model this after a somewhat linkin park approach. Those are both good bands but I dont see how you could make this to sound like disturbed. It seemed to me as a sort of rap. As to the lyrics themselves, they were obviously written by a talented writer. You are gifted and you blatantly show off your way with words. I would like to read other lyrics that you transcribed.

There are some words spelled wrong.

Try this in line nine It’s becoming not becomes.

Line 10 It should be to everyone else’s not to everybody else’s. It would just sound better.
Line 13 should be “My heart keep’s right on beating.
I am strong no matter how callous people are.

I tried learning to speak in stereotypical sterilized white lie’s.
Only to find that I hated reciting those tactful ryhem’s.
I just can’t understand what I’m feeling inside
So why keep trying, because it’s a gospel I’ll live by.

I feel like i’m blazing a pathway,
twisted and long.
There’s no map to rely on.
Time after time I find myself fighting,
paying for ignorantly living my life all wrong.
This is the sacrafice I must make,
not to get stommped on again.
Keep myself from hearing,
the words you dont belong.

You see just changing up the words and bit and making them rhyme will help you out alot. I hope that I have help you.

I really like this it could go rock or rap either way. You need to find yourself a chorus if you gonna make it a rock song though. Nice usage of words but you need to work on grammer and rhyming. I think your doing great just work on your wording.

more like early Jam than Depche mode
fairly basic, lyrics lack muturity, i thought this was a teenage rant

This is a unique way of looking at one`s existence…  She either needs lots of therapy or has grounded herself in the reality of okay life`s given me a bushel of lemons lets see what I can make of them…  very inciteful…