Poetry / Just Don't

When you’re lying there alone at night,

Don’t think about me.

If you find yourself wonderin’ if I’m alright,

Don’t think about me.

Should you find some empty space in your heart,

Don’t think about me.

Don’t think about me at all—

And whatever you do, please don’t fall

In love with me.

It’s no good for you, no good for us—

Just keep on goin’ with the way it was,

Because if you don’t, I’ll have to run

And I don’t want to lose you.

So whatever you might be thinkin’ now,

It’s best to just forget about

Me.

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April 19, 2008

Elim121

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Elim121 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

You’ve chosen a universal human emotion, Fear. Fear of loosing, fear of loving and it all stems from the human condition called insecurity. This is a very good piece and very identifiable. I do have one comment though on a personal level. You will never know true love unless you are willing to be hurt. It is normal to put up emotional walls and say, “Forget about me,” but to live your life miserable and lonely isn’t much of a life. Not saying that you are this way but the sentiment of this piece can lead one’s self to end up this way. Overall a great job!

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April 20, 2008

by goofygoober168

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:) Lovely sentiment…heh. I do have true love…or at least what I hope is true love…problem is, old loves don’t want to die. This was, however, written between loves…eh…if I ever write the whole story I’ll send you the (10,000 page) manuscript. :)

April 20, 2008

by Elim121

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Sounds good. That should get me some credits to use for a while:-)

April 20, 2008

by goofygoober168

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heh.

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February 28, 2008

JonathanJoel

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JonathanJoel reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I can feel for this poem 100%. It’s ironic that just this morning I woke up thinking about someone that I have lost. People go away all the time, whether it’s death or ended relationships or just the whirlpool of life sucking them down. I think this poem is a great way to express the emotions that millions of people share across the globe. Great piece.

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February 28, 2008

djsquared

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djsquared reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Wow! While I know they are not, these could literally be the thoughts of a person whom I care for deeply. The line, “And I don’t want to lose you.” is somewhat ironic, but poignant—it suggests the difficulty of teetering between romantic love and close friendship. ”Just keep… way it was” felt like a punch to the abdomen only because I have read that exact request in more than one personal correspondence.

It almost feels like song lyrics in the first half. Have you considered making it such? I think if you were to improve the evenness of the meter, it would make a fine set of lyrics.