Poetry / Fly away

I like the imagery.  Keep exploring.  Push your boundaries.

I truely understand this poem. I find that i think about this all the time. In the most strangest moments i think about the things we cant obtain. I believe that god made us this way. To always strive for the things we can not reach. That is why we slowly crave for the things that are unobtainable. Hmm…you know the thing is that i always think about the birds and the sky. They can do everything we can do in their life style but i guess the only thing different is that they cant write. How sad that is because id like to hear their side of the story of what it feels like.

I really enjoyed reading your piece.  It was great, its broken down nicely and each section to it may start the same, but is able to linger into something new.  I had fun reading it, and it was easy to understand the first skim through.

GOod work overall.

I like it. Consice, structured, and with a good ending. Try and see about your flow, and with the connotation of certain words like, “fatter,” and, “jolly.”
These aren’t the words you want to have in a romantic poem, I think.

E

I actually like this. There is a pure and innocent quality to it. While at times the rhyming seems generic, it actually works throughout. Maybe “jolly” is a little forced, but still this is a sing-songy ode to innocence and youth. It seems more as a lyric as opposed to a poem, but it actually works.

Okay, if somebody gives me a review like I’m getting ready to give you, I’d honestly believe they didn’t take the time to read it, or were being facitious.  I LOVED THIS!!  It’s easy to understand, there is no deep thought provoking unknown, it’s light (yet still something we all feel), and I LITERALLY LOVED IT.  In a year, this is the first 10/10 I’ve ever given in poetry.  I look forward to reading more.  Robin