Poetry / The Highest Stakes

You wrote about such a frightening experience to you and that shows in all the emotion that came forward.  My favorite line was “for all the years that you are old you’re none too wise unless you fold”  I think that could be a GREAT quote!  Profound and true true true!  The only comment is watch your spelling in places like “your” you’re and minor cleaning up  of capitalizations.  Other than that this is really heartfelt.  Like it much.

I enjoyed it because you clearly communicated what you wanted to communicate. No fancy words, no beating around the bush: it was short and to the point.

In that sense, I felt that what little rhyme you did have took away from the poem. All too often I see writers that have half-rhyming stanzas, and it’s just a peeve of mine. I feel that if you committed to rhyming the whole thing in a set scheme, it could be stronger, or if you focused more on content rather then presentation, it could be stronger.

Overall, I enjoyed it. I just feel that you could make this a much stronger piece with some revision.

I feel like this poem is very forced. The stop and wait…hesitate parts seem repetitive. I don’t really understand why your saying not to hesitate if you’re gambling too high. You’re message seems very unclear.

Wow, I was blown away by this. I don’t know how to write poems but I think this is brilliant and I love the way the words rhyme and keep in rhythm with each other.

Good job!

I’m new to this whole review and being a critic.  

Last year I went through 3 wrecks and I see where your going with this poem.  

Very well done.  I think you have potential.

I like the story line (thoughts) in this poem.  Some word choice could be improved; be careful of overused words.

“your gambling with your life”...spelled you’re